Topic: More and more companies allow employees to work from home via the internet. Do you think working from home is effective? Why?
My essay:
In recent years, there is an increasing number of employees who can work from home via the internet. From my perspective, this brings both benefits and drawbacks which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
On the one hand, working from home is effective to a certain extent. First of all, it helps workers to save time. They do not have to get up early to prepare to go to their workplace. Normally, if you work at 8 am, you need to wake up at 6 or 7 or even sooner. However, when allowed to work at home, employees can wake up at 7.45 am, for example. This will help them to have a good sleep to charge their batteries, thus, boost their productivity. Besides, working at home means that they can have their privacy and feel more comfortable so that they can complete their tasks effectively.
On the other hand, working from home through the internet brings negative effect on work productivity. Employees will be easily distracted by some social networking platforms such as Facebook and TikTok or some video games. This will cause laziness and the workers will not complete their duties or they just do the tasks superficially, which reduces work productivity. Therefore, working from home seems to be ineffective. Furthermore, it also affects employees’ soft skills such as communication skills since they will stay at home and do not socialize.
In conclusion, although I personally think it is advantageous to stay at home to work, we should not underestimate its disadvantages.
In recent years, You put this memorized phrase here. It is not very relevant.) there is are an increasing number of employees who can work from home via the internet. From my perspective, this brings both benefits and drawbacks
The essays you posted earlier were the type "advantages/ disadvantages".
This is a different type of essay. It is not an advantages/disadvantages essay, so it needs a different response.
There are 5 different essay types. You have to answer each one differently. This one has two questions in the prompt. You must answer these questions.
(Do not mention your essay. Do not refer to your writing. The examiner knows you are going to write paragraphs.)
which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
anhduonganhduong wrote: Please help me to correct my IELTS essay (Original post)Quote Topic: More and more companies allow employees to work from home via the internet. Do you think working from home is effective? Why?
In recent years, there are an increasing number of employees who can work from home via the internet. From my perspective, I believe it is quite effective. this brings both benefits and drawbacks which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
On the one hand, Working from home is effective to a certain extent.
First of all, it helps workers to save time. They do not have to get up early to prepare to go to their workplace. Normally, if you work at 8 am, you need to wake up at 6 or 7 or even sooner. However, when allowed to work at home, employees can wake up at 7.45 am, for example. This will help them to have a good sleep to charge their batteries, and thus, boost their productivity.
Second, working at home means that they can have their privacy and feel more comfortable so that they can complete their tasks effectively.
You need to expand this second point.
Alternatively, you could argue that it is not effective, and write two reasons, one in each paragraph, why you believe that.
On the other hand, working from home through the internet brings negative effect on work productivity. Employees will be easily distracted by some social networking platforms such as Facebook and TikTok or some video games. This will cause laziness and the workers will not complete their duties or they just do the tasks superficially, which reduces work productivity. Therefore, working from home seems to be ineffective. Furthermore, it also affects employees’ soft skills such as communication skills since they will stay at home and do not socialize.
In conclusion, although I personally think it is advantageous to stay at home to work, because of convenience and privacy., we should not underestimate its disadvantages.