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  • When new towns are planned, it is more important to develop public parks or sport facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their freetime in. To what extent, do you agree or disagree ?

It is suggested that town planners should extend more community parks or sport services instead of shopping malls. I find myself in complete disagreement with this idea because these three places are incomparable.


On the one hand, the importance of parks and sports halls in urban planning is crystal clear. Firstly, these places provide a suitable atmosphere and equipment for inhabitants. As a result, they can go there to relax and do the exercise which helps them to keep fit, reduce work-related stress, and elevate their mood. Secondly, going to public parks and sports areas is a golden chance to socialize with neighbors. The reason is people can effectively interact with others to maintain a harmonious relationship between residents and create a caring and friendly neighborhood.


On the other hand, shopping centers also play a vital role in society and they are indispensable in any living region. The first to be mentioned is shopping malls supply residents with enormous varied products that are essential to serving their daily needs like food, clothes, or medicine. It would enable them to easily purchase items in town and transport them home with less time and at a lower cost. In addition, the unemployment rate in the area can be diminished. To explain, town dwellers can find jobs in retails not only to generate income for themselves but also to reduce the burden on the family.


In summary, although public parks and sports halls can satisfy living standards, I believe that shopping malls are equally valuable as they can provide job opportunities and convenience to the locals.

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[ 1] The process of building modern towns and cities is very complicated. [ 2] Town planners are often faced with challenging choices. They need to provide all kinds of facilities and amenities for the residents. It is suggested by some that town planners should extend design more community parks or sport services venues instead of shopping malls. I find myself in complete disagreement with this idea because all those facilities are equally necessary. these three places are incomparable.

On the one hand, the importance of parks and sports halls in urban planning is crystal clear. Firstly, these places provide a suitable atmosphere and equipment venue for inhabitants. As a result, they can residents to go there to relax and do the exercise, which helps them to keep fit, reduce work-related stress, and elevate their mood. Secondly, going to public parks and sports areas is a golden chance valuable opportunity to socialize with others. neighbors. The reason is people can effectively interact with others to maintain a harmonious relationship between residents and create a caring and friendly neighborhood. [ 3]

On the other hand, shopping centers also play a vital role in society, and they are indispensable in any living region. modern urban setting. The first to be mentioned is Firstly, shopping malls supply provide residents with enormous varied a variety of stores and facilities selling a diverse range of products and services that are essential to serving for their daily needs like food, clothes, or medicine. It would enable them to easily purchase items in town and transport them home with Moreover, shopping malls enable shoppers need to spend less time and buy at a lower cost because the shops are all in the one area, typically out of expensive city centres. In addition, large shopping malls create valuable job opportunities for the locals, so which lowers the unemployment rate in the area. can be diminished. To explain, town dwellers can find jobs in retails not only to generate income for themselves but also to reduce the burden on the family.

In summary, although public parks and sports halls are important for rest and recreation, can satisfy living standards, I believe that whereas shopping malls are equally valuable as they can provide job opportunities and convenience to for the locals.

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[ 1]: Write a simple, general sentence at the start of the introduction to present the topic to the reader.

[ 2]: Write some general background to elaborate on the first sentence.

[ 3]: That somewhat strays off topic. Think of other points/examples instead.

Note that the given essay question does not say that one type of facility should be built instead of the other. It just asks whether there should be more of one than the other. Therefore, a better essay would compare a situation where there are many shopping malls and few parks versus the opposite.

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This is a well-written essay. It meets all the criteria of academic writing. First, the writer demonstrates a smooth style of writing where ideas are well-connected. Secondly, the writer uses a range of good vocabulary and a range of grammatical structures. Finally, the thesis is driven and supported well. Thus, this essay scores 7 out of 9.

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MouthrendererThis is a well-written essay.

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AlpheccaStarsAre you an IELTS examiner, mouthrender?

I very much doubt that.

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AlpheccaStarsAre you an IELTS examiner, mouthrender?

I very much doubt that.

I tend to agree with you.

I am not a trained examiner and have never admitted to being one.

However, I have studied the rubric for IELTS Task 2, and also watched many videos of IELTS examiners, and seriously doubt that this essay would be awarded a 7. That is a very high score that is difficult to achieve even for native speakers.

The first paragraph thesis statement is somewhat off-target. It would lose points for "task completion."

I do not give scores because I do not want to deceive the posters, disappointing them or giving false hopes.