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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

International tourism plays a vital role in our society. However, some individuals emphasize that international tourism can bring hospitality between local people and foreigners than create understanding. In my opinion, tourism can have both positive and negative influences.

On the on hand, tourism can connect local residents to visitors around the world. First, tourism can create employment for local people. Many jobs realting to tourist services bestow high salary on native workforce. Moreover, plenty of areas are relied on tourism to develop. This can make local people to feel free to welcome passenger from other countries. Second, international tourism gives an oppotunities for people to learn and understanding variety of culture of different religions. One more point, people can study languages so they could easily to exchange ideas or felling. As a result, local people and visitors can create a sustainable relationship.

On the other hand, tourism might also create some misunderstanding between people from different cultures. Tourism can be a catalyst causing pollution and waste in many countries. Hundreds miles of forest has been chopped down to construct recreation infracstuture serving tourists. Besides, international tourism may affect local culture and business in negative ways. Thousands of people choose to work in rhus field and some of the traditional jobs can be forgoten in the future. The number of hotels, restaurants are raising, which attracts young labor to work in there rather than laering craftmanship. These bed effects might result in opposing of local people.

To conclude, people should consider influences of international tourism. If we can control the negative effects of tourism, many people can earn benefits from this field.

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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

International tourism plays a vital role in our society. However, some individuals emphasize that international tourism can bring hospitality between local people and foreigners than create understanding. (That is not a grammatical sentence. You need to make a comparison with the word "than." e.g. Martin is taller than his brother. - The comparison is the height of the two boys.

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In my opinion, tourism can have both positive and negative influences. (You did not answer the topic question. i.e. Do you agree that tourism create more tension compared with understanding? It is not asking about positives and negatives. It is only asking about tension versus understanding. Much of your writing does not address this question.)

On the on hand, tourism can connect local residents to visitors around the world. First, tourism can create employment for local people. (Off-topic) Many jobs realting to tourist services bestow high salary on native workforce. (Off-topic) Moreover, plenty of areas are relied on tourism to develop. (Off-topic) This can make local people to feel free to welcome passenger from other countries. Second, international tourism gives an oppotunities for people to learn and understanding variety of culture of different religions. One more point, people can study languages so they could easily to exchange ideas or felling. As a result, local people and visitors can create a sustainable relationship. (Do the tourists who come to your country learn your language? )

On the other hand, tourism might also create some misunderstanding between people from different cultures. Tourism can be a catalyst causing pollution and waste in many countries. Hundreds miles of forest has been chopped down to construct recreation infracstuture serving tourists. Besides, international tourism may affect local culture and business in negative ways. Thousands of people choose to work in rhus field and some of the traditional jobs can be forgoten in the future. The number of hotels, restaurants are raising, which attracts young labor to work in there rather than laering craftmanship. These bed effects might result in opposing of local people.

To conclude, people should consider influences of international tourism. If we can control the negative effects of tourism, many people can earn benefits from this field.

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I could almost understand my mistake. (Verb: understand, make)
I almost made the same mistake.


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mai huong HoangHowever, some individuals emphasize that international tourism can bring hospitality between local people and foreigners than create understanding.

However, some individuals emphasize that international tourism can create feelings of hostility and aggravation between the local people and foreigners rather than ones of harmony and understanding.

Here we contrast "hostility and aggravation" with "harmony and understanding". These feelings are opposites, so they can be compared.

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