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You can choose any shape of aquarium such as cubic, hexagon, polygon, bowl, etc. One fish is uits for one gallon aquarium. If you have 10-gallon aquarium, you can put 10 fish. Since this fish is peaceful fish, you can care with another peaceful fish. You can put ornament to the aquarium like dried wood or gravel. You have better to put colorific ornament so the black phantom could be seen. The fish like water plant too. You can add common water plant such as sword plant, cabomba, etc at your phantom aquarium.
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I have underlined problem areas and stricken out inappropriate words:

You can choose any shape of aquarium such as cubic, hexagon, polygon, bowl, etc. One fish is uits for one gallon aquarium. If you have 10-gallon aquarium, you can put 10 fish. Since this fish is peaceful fish, you can care with another peaceful fish. You can put ornament to the aquarium like dried wood or gravel. You have better to put colorific ornament so the black phantom could be seen. The fish like water plant too. You can add common water plant such as sword plant, cabomba, etc at your phantom aquarium.
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hi forums,
would you please to edit my false.
Mister Micawber.
I have underlined problem areas and stricken out inappropriate words:

You can choose any shape of aquarium such as cubic, hexagon, polygon, bowl, etc. One fish is uits for one gallon aquarium. If you have 10-gallon aquarium, you can put 10 fish. Since this fish is peaceful fish, you can care with another peaceful fish. You can put ornament to the aquarium like dried wood or gravel. You have better to put colorific ornament so the black phantom could be seen. The fish like water plant too. You can add common water plant such as sword plant, cabomba, etc at your phantom aquarium.
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i have tried to correct my paragraph

You can choose any shape of aquarium example: as cubic, polygon, bowl, etc. One fish suits for one gallon aquarium. If you have ten-gallon aquarium, you can put ten fish. Since the fish is a peaceful fish, you can care it with another peaceful fish. You can put the aquarium ornament like dried wood or gravel. You may put full color ornaments so the black phantom can be seen. The fish likes water plants. You can add common water plants such as sword plants, cabomba, etc to your phantom aquarium.
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You can choose any shape of aquarium, for example, cubic, polygonal, bowl-shaped, etc. A one-gallon aquarium is suitable for one fish. If you have a ten-gallon aquarium, you can put in ten fish. Since the Black Phantom is a peaceful fish, you can care for it with other peaceful fish. You can put in aquarium ornaments like dried wood or gravel. You may put in full-color ornaments so the Black Phantom can be seen. The fish likes water plants. You can add common water plants such as sword plants, cabomba, etc., to your Phantom aquarium.
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Would you please to give me any suggest to improve my paragraph ?
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As it stands, it is OK. It may need reorganization or other changes when it is in the rest of the essay.
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I often wonder how old people manage to stay happy.Especially when their health fails.one afternoon i expressed this wonderment to my 85-year-old grandmother.Because I felt it important to find an answer. she was in her wheelchair. having suffered a broken hip last year. i sat in a chair next to her. Thingking about how frail she had gottten. Though i didn't really know exactly what words to use. I finally took courage and asked,"Grandma, how do you handle being confined to a wheelchair? When you were always so active?" She thought for an instant. Then she said, "Getting old is not for sissies. Not even for people who are not sissies. Especially if you have lost your health mobility. But, as long as i have my mind,i can enjoy something every day. For instance, your visit right now. It's such fun to hear about your college life. Particularly the classes you are taking and the friends you are making". What she was really telling me was that people have to make the best of their situation. Which is true at any age. Not just when you're old. I felt inspired by her attitude.
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