It's what I wrote and I can't be sure that it's correct in grammar and the way of writing. I think that I make some mistakes. I really don't know how to write well, so i will be very happy if I recieve some help from you.
" In this century,human have a great chance to be more long-lived.The reason why we can enjoy this fact is that there 's a lot of brilliant improvements in science and technology, especially in medicine. People themselve who live in narrow and crowded cities are those who understand this fact the best. They are looked after by skillful nurses and doctors.They also receive new prescriptions from the doctors which are very effective in curing people of deadly deseases.
The regimen of people is more and more improved. Science and technology help people realize what nutrilites, vitamins, and minerals are necessary for their bodies. When people are prosperous and have a lot of spare time , they may spend more time in playing sport and feel that the life is more meaning. In sum up, those above-mentioned furthermore help people improve their longevity. "
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Khai Minh
In this century,human *are living longer than ever.The reason why we can enjoy this *is that there 's a lot of *improvements in science and technology, especially in medicine. People *themselve (typo) who live in *narrow (are all cities narrow?) and crowded cities are those who understand this *fact (awkward) the best. They are looked after by skillful nurses and doctors. They also receive new prescriptions from the doctors which are very effective in curing people of deadly deseases (*really?).
The regimen of people is more and more improved (awkward0. Science and technology help people realize what *nutrilites (what are you trying to say?), vitamins, and minerals are necessary for their bodies. When people are prosperous and have a lot of spare time , they may spend more time *in (prep) playing *sport and feel that the life *is more meaning. *In sum up, those above-mentioned furthermore help people improve their longevity. "
To julielai,

You guy did a very great job on helping others over their writing. As well as other moderator in this forum is so helpful and awesome. Thanks you so much for your contribution for all of us.

Anyway, could you recommend us as most weak writers were non-english speaker on how to improve and overcome this writing problem? Thanks in advance. luve
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Hi luve,

I'm not a native speaker myself, though I try my best to sound like one.

I suggest you work on your grammar first and go from there.

Cheers.
I need you helping me over this, my grammar is my main problems. Thanks in advance

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LuveTo julielai,

You guy did a very great job on helping others over their writing. As well as other moderator in this forum is so helpful and awesome. Thanks you so much for your contribution for all of us.

Anyway, could you recommend us as most weak writers were non-english speaker on how to improve and overcome this writing problem? Thanks in advance. luve
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