Is it too long? Should I make it shorter? I will be delivering this letter myself and will also be talking with the business manager or owner. Any help will be great! Thanks a bunch!

Dear _________,

My n ame is __________ and this year I am Historian of the ____________ Speech/Drama/Debate Team. I am writing to see if you would be interested in joining the Friends of Speech/Drama/Debate Membership Foundation. This foundation supports the members of the ________ Speech/Drama/Debate team with travel expenses to tournaments all over the state and sponsors us in the National Invitational Tournaments at Columbia University in New York City and Harvard University in Boston, Massachusetts. With your membership, you will be helping me travel with the team.

With membership in this foundation, you will have ownership in the most successful program at _____________ – producing eight state champions, five national finalists, and ranking in the top ten programs in the state for the last thirteen years.

- With a donation/membership of 50 dollars equaling a Bronze level of sponsorship, you will receive your name on the appropriate plaque and a framed thank you not from our officers.

- A Silver level of sponsorship, a 150-dollar donation, will give you two tickets to our Fall Show, your name on the appropriate plaque, a fall and spring newsletter, and a framed thank you note from our officers.

- With a Gold level of sponsorship, a membership/donation of 250 dollars, you will receive four Fall Show tickets, your name on the appropriate plaque, a fall and spring newsletter, and a framed thank you note from our officers.

- With a donation/membership of 500 dollars, a Platinum level sponsorship, you will receive four Fall Show tickets, an invitation to the end of the year Appreciation Banquet, your name on the appropriate plaque, a fall and spring newsletter, and a framed thank you note from our officers.

- A Diamond level of sponsorship with a membership/donation of 1,000 dollars will provide you with four tickets to our Fall Show, an invitation to the end of the year Appreciation Banquet, banquet recognition, your own glass trophy to be displayed at your choice of business or our school, a fall and spring newsletter, and a framed thank you note from our officers.

Looks good. You might want to include information on where the plaques are to be displayed and who will see them (as this is the main benefit for them).
Thanks a bunch!