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I translated a news article about a Live 8 concert. Please, help me to correct it.

My translation:
The only African concert did not attract the crowdAbout 8000 people went to for the concert Live 8 organized in the eve of the G8 in and asked a cancellation of the debt of African countries and a doubling of aid to the continent. In spite of the small interest, the only African concert can be proud of having received a distinguished (important) guest: Nelson Mandella.
From our correspondent of
“Tata, Tata!”, scanted the crowd at the apparition on the stage, in downtown , of the fragile figure of the most well-known grandfather of the world, Nelson Mandela. “I said I retrieved from public life, I should not be here”, joked Nelson Mandela before sending a call to the G8 leaders who are meeting this week in . “You have the opportunity to stop a crime against the humanity”, said he to them. “Overcome poverty is not an act of charity, it is a justice. Where there is poverty, there is no freedom,” added he.

Thank you very much,

Spoonfedbaby
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The only African concert did not attract a crowd

About 8000 people went to Johannesburg for the Live 8 concert organized for the eve of the G8 conference in Scotland, asking for the cancellation of the debt of African countries and a doubling of aid to the continent. In spite of the lack of interest, the only African concert can be proud of having received a distinguished guest-- Nelson Mandela.

From our correspondent in Johannesburg [no italics!]:

“Tata, Tata!”, chanted the crowd at the appearance, on the Newton stage in downtown Johannesburg, of the fragile figure of the best-known grandfather in the world, Nelson Mandela. “I said I retired from public life; I should not be here”, joked Mandela, before sending a call to the G8 leaders who are meeting this week in Scotland. “You have the opportunity to stop a crime against humanity”, he said to them. “Overcoming poverty is not an act of charity, it is justice. Where there is poverty, there is no freedom,” he added.
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...the Live 8 concert organized for the eve of the G8 conference in Scotland

Hi Mister Micawber, does it suggest something else from the phrase 'on the eve of '

Thanks.
Yes. The concert was not 'organized' on the eve, but 'held' on the eve; it was organized some time before, 'for' (performance on) the eve.
Thanks to Mister Micawber and K.O. for your helps.

First revised text:

The only African concert did not attract a crowd
About 8000 people went to Johannesburg for the Live 8 concert held on the eve of the G8 conference in Scotland, asking for the cancellation of the debt of African countries and a doubling of aid to the continent. In spite of the lack of interest, the only African concert can be proud of having received a distinguished guest-- Nelson Mandela.

From our correspondent in Johannesburg
“Tata, Tata!”, chanted the crowd at the appearance, on the Newton stage in downtown Johannesburg, of the fragile figure of the best-known grandfather in the world, Nelson Mandela. “I said I retired from public life; I should not be here”, joked Mandela, before sending a call to the G8 leaders who are meeting this week in Scotlandlace. “You have the opportunity to stop a crime against humanity”, he said to them. “Overcoming poverty is not an act of charity, it is justice. Where there is poverty, there is no freedom,” he added.

Spoonfedbaby
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On second thought, the commas in the second paragraph after 'appearance' and after 'Johannesburg' should be deleted: they are unnecessary and they slow down the reading of the text. Also, delete the lacy ending of 'Scotlandlace'.

Otherwise, it looks fine, SFB.