The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant.

The visuals present three examined indicators, agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial, contributing in percentage terms to the UK’s economy within 100 years.

It is easily seen that agriculture was ranked the most favored in the first 50 years, however, it has experienced a dramatic drop since 1950. Likewise, there was a mild decrease in manufacturing considered as the second preferred sector over time. Conversely, Business and financial saw a steady increase throughout the period from 1950 to 2000. In 1900, the contribution rate of agriculture gained the most as compared to others, at 48 percent, and slightly rose to the peak of 50 percent in 1950. Alternatively, after the climax, agriculture’s proportions drastically leveled off and contributed below 5 percent, seen as the least recorded in 2000. Whilst, despite a modest starting point in early times, business and financial, gradually leveling up and surpassing other two sectors to reach the most contributed rate in 2000, at over 35 percent much larger than manufacturing and agriculture, 18 percent and 2 percent respectively. Additionally, manufacturing shared the similar trend with agriculture that its latest figure plummeted roughly by half in comparison to that in 1900. It is evident from the chart that business and financial areas have been massively focused of late, meanwhile, less concentration on the other two are blatant.


The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant.


The visuals present three examined indicators, agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial, contributing in percentage terms to the UK’s economy within 100 years.


It is easily seen that agriculture was ranked the most favored in the first 50 years, however, it has experienced a dramatic drop since 1950. Likewise, there was a mild decrease in manufacturing considered as the second preferred sector over time. Conversely, Business and financial saw a steady increase throughout the period from 1950 to 2000. In 1900, the contribution rate of agriculture gained the most as compared to others, at 48 percent, and slightly rose to the peak of 50 percent in 1950. Alternatively, after the climax, agriculture’s proportions drastically leveled off and contributed below 5 percent, seen as the least recorded in 2000. Whilst, despite a modest starting point in early times, business and financial, gradually leveling up and surpassing other two sectors to reach the most contributed rate in 2000, at over 35 percent much larger than manufacturing and agriculture, 18 percent and 2 percent respectively. Additionally, manufacturing shared the similar trend with agriculture that its latest figure plummeted roughly by half in comparison to that in 1900. It is evident from the chart that business and financial areas have been massively focused of late, meanwhile, less concentration on the other two is blatant.

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The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The visuals (wrong word - what kind of plot is this? ) present (not a good word choice) three examined indicators, (wrong words) agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial, contributing in percentage terms (That is not natural English) to the UK’s economy within (wrong word choice) 100 years.

It is easily seen that (Those are unnecessary words. Delete them.) agriculture was ranked the most favored (not a good evaluation. It is not about choices.) in the first 50 years, (comma splice error - ungrammatical sentence) however, it has experienced (Numbers do not have experiences. People do.) a dramatic drop since 1950. Likewise, there was a mild decrease in manufacturing considered as the second preferred (It is not about preferences or choices) sector over time. Conversely, Business and financial saw (Sectors cannot see. No eyes. Read my advice.) a steady (Wrong word - you do not have data for all the years between 1950 and 2000. That adverb is for line graphs.) increase throughout the period from 1950 to 2000. In 1900, the contribution rate (Wrong word - there are no rates plotted on this chart) of agriculture gained the most as compared to others, at 48 percent, and slightly rose to the peak showed a high value (Read my advice. It is impossible to determine where a peak is when you have data once every 25 years.) of 50 percent in 1950. Alternatively, after the climax, agriculture’s proportions (unnatural) drastically leveled off (That is for line graphs, not bar charts.) and contributed below 5 percent, seen as the least recorded in 2000. Whilst, despite a modest starting point in early times, business and financial, gradually (Wrong word - you do not have data for all the years between 1900 and 2000. That adverb is for line graphs.) leveling up and surpassing other two sectors to reach the most contributed rate (Wrong word - there are no rates plotted on this chart) in 2000, at over 35 percent (50% and 80% are over 35%, you must be more precise.) much larger than manufacturing and agriculture, 18 percent and 2 percent respectively. Additionally, manufacturing shared the similar trend with agriculture that its latest figure (wrong word) plummeted (Do not use "drama" words in Task 1. It is not scientific.) roughly by half in comparison to that in 1900. It is evident from the chart that (Those words do not give information. Delete them) business and financial areas have been massively focused of late, (Do not draw conclusions or make inferences in Task 1. Just describe the data.) (Comma splice error, ungrammatical sentence) meanwhile, less concentration on the other two is blatant.


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The bar chart compares the percentage contributions of three sectors, agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services to the UK economy during the previous century. Data points are given for four years: 1900, 1950, 1975 and 2000.

Overall, at the beginning and also at mid-century, these three sectors represented nearly all of the UK economy. But by the end, they had been reduced to about half. Business and financial services started as the smallest of the three, but it grew to end up as the largest.

In 1900, these three sectors made up 96% of the UK economy. Agriculture represented about half of the economy for the first half century, but dropped to only one-tenth between 1950 and 1975. The end-century value was about 2-3%. Business and Financial services was the opposite, starting at about 2-3% in 1900 and approximately doubling during each time span on the chart. It ended at about 35%, ten times that of Agriculture. Manufacturing also showed a decline, from 45% to 15%.


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