The charts below show how selected age groups purchased concert, cinema, and theatre tickets online over the first three months of 2006 in three countries and how the Internet was accessed.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts depict the percentage of two age groups purchasing tickets for three means of entertainment, concert, cinema, and theatre in the first quarter of the year 2006 and the proportion of three digital devices used by people from Australia, the UK, and Malaysia.

Overall, the percentages of the 25-44 age group buying online tickets for entertaining purposes from three examined nations were larger than that of the other group. Additionally, Desktop computer in percentage seemed to be the most favored means of access utilized by people from three nations in comparison to other technological access.

With regard to the first chart, the rates of buyers from Australia and the UK, with the age group of 25-44, shared the same value of nearly 55 percent. Similarly, ratios of people aging over 65 tended to purchase web-based entrance tickets, in the UK and Malaysia, occupying the value of 42%.

As can be seen from the second graph, Desktop computer, which was seen as the most preferred technological device among the three by citizens from three nations, making up at 56 percent, 58 percent, and 62 percent respectively. Conversely, Mobile phone was considered the least favored digital access, its proportions were initially recorded at modestly 22 percent for Australian users, and the other two figures were 23 percent for the UK and 28 percent for Malaysians.

Your essay, nearly 230 words, is too long. The minimum word count is 150. Ideally, aim for 170-190 words in Task 1.

The bar charts (how many) depict the percentage of two age groups (What are these groups?) purchasing tickets for three forms means of entertainment, (concert, cinema, and theatre) (You have to set these off for clarity.) in the first quarter of the year 2006 and the proportion of three digital devices (That is an incorrect expression. What is half of three devices?) used by people from Australia, the UK, and Malaysia.

The two bar charts show quite different things. To be clear in your description, make separate sentences for each one. Your description is not good.

Overall, the percentages of the 25-44 age group buying online tickets for entertaining purposes from three examined nations (poor English) were larger than that of the other group. (What is the other group? You have not explained this.) Additionally, Desktop (Desktop is not a proper noun. It is not capitalized.) computer in percentage ("computer in percentage" is not a valid expression.) seemed to be the most favored means of access utilized by people from three nations (That is unnatural. Is it any three nations?) in comparison to other technological access. (That makes no sense.)

With regard to the first chart, the rates (wrong word. Didn't you read my advice?) of buyers from Australia and the UK, with (wrong word) the age group of 25-44, shared the same value of nearly 55 percent. Similarly, ratios (wrong word) of people aging (wrong form) over 65 tended to (Do not use "tend" or "seem" when you have actual data. These words are for guessing.) purchase web-based entrance tickets, (That makes no sense) in the UK and Malaysia, occupying (wrong word) the value of 42%.

As can be seen from the second graph, Desktop (Desktop is not a proper noun.) computer, which was seen as the most preferred technological device among the three (You have not told the reader what these three are. The reader is very confused.) by citizens from three nations, making up at 56 percent, 58 percent, and 62 percent respectively. Conversely, Mobile phone (Mobile is not a proper noun.) was considered the least favored digital access, its proportions were initially recorded (There is no time variation here. "initial" is for an earlier time.) at modestly 22 percent for Australian users, and the other two figures (wrong word) were 23 percent for the UK and 28 percent for Malaysians.


You need to learn proper English expressions for math / science contexts, and how to describe categories correctly. Your essay has a lot of issues. I gave you links for my advice before, but you keep making the same mistakes.


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