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topic:Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to have a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that people keeping to one career path are more likely to have a fulfilling working life than those who try various jobs. While this thinking is valid to a certain extent, I believe that people who experiment with different careers also have some interesting experiences in their life.

On the one hand, there are many compelling reasons why people committing their whole life to a job tend to have a flowing working life. Firstly, They may gain more promotion opportunities because when they contribute to an organization for a prolonged period of time they will acquire professional experience and practical skills. For example, an employee working in the sales department for 10 years will have a chance to be promoted to sales manager rather than a new staff member. Secondly, the employee pursues one career and tries their best so as to be recognised by employers. Because leaders who will look at how you work and contribute to their company in order to evaluate your ability to work. If they recognize you for doing well then you will get a decent salary.

On the other hand, the current trend, young people who have an adventurous spirit and get bored easily may greatly enjoy job-hopping. For instance, these people will experiment various careers making them realize their calling, that is what they really want to be. Moreover, people exploring a range of different career paths give them a sense of satisfaction. Because they will feel very constrained and uncomfortable unless they get to experience many different jobs and discover many new things in those positions.

In conclusion, many people choose to make a commitment to a particular job, leading them to a content working life. While others tend to try various jobs in order to constantly renew themselves and their best version. I believe that each choice has its own validity.

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It is argued that people keeping to one career path are more likely to have a fulfilling working life than those who try various jobs. While this thinking is valid to a certain extent, I believe that people who experiment with different careers also have some interesting experiences in their life.


You did not answer the essay prompt clearly. The examiner is looking for an answer to this question: To what extent do you agree or disagree? (with this opinion / statement)

You need to use an adverb of extent. For example:

I somewhat agree.
I totally disagree.
I agree up to a point.
I mostly disagree.
I wholeheartedly agree.


It is good to know a good handful of adverbs of extent because this is a very common prompt in IELTS Task 2 essays.


Complete agreement / disagreement:
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completely
fully
totally
wholeheartedly
unreservedly
with no reservations
without reservation
unequivocally
unquestionably
with no hesitation
unconditionally

Partial agreement / disagreement:
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somewhat
partially
partly
to some extent / to a limited extent / to a point
with (some / certain / a few) reservations
conditionally

Slight agreement / disagreement:
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a little (bit)
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On the one hand, there are many compelling reasons why people committing their whole life to a job tend to have a flowing (wrong word) working life. Firstly, First, They (wrong capitalization. ) may gain more promotion opportunities because when they contribute to an organization for a prolonged period of time they will acquire professional experience as well as connections in the company and learn the company's policies and rules. and practical skills. For example, an employee working in the sales department for 10 years will have a better chance to be promoted to sales manager rather than a new staff member with less experience. Secondly, Second, the employee pursues one career and tries their best so as to be recognised by the managers employers. Because leaders who will look at how you work and contribute to their company in order to evaluate your ability to work. If they recognize you for doing well then you will get a decent salary.


On the other hand, the current trend, (ungrammatical - this noun phrase does not have a function in the sentence) young people who have an adventurous spirit and get bored easily may greatly enjoy job-hopping. For instance, (wrong transition) These people will experiment with various kinds of work before they careers making them realize their calling, that is what they really want to be. Moreover, people exploring a range of different career paths the exploration itself will give them a sense of satisfaction. Because If they stick to only one job, they will feel very constrained and uncomfortable, leading to being continually demoralized and depressed. unless they get to experience many different jobs and discover many new things in those positions. (repetition)


In conclusion, many people choose to make a commitment to a particular job, leading them to a content working life. (You need to restate your thesis) Nevertheless, I disagree that they are more likely to be satisfied, since those who try a variety of job types can also be fulfilled and happy. While others tend to try various jobs in order to constantly renew themselves (ungrammatical) and their best version. (That does not make sense) I believe that each choice has its own validity.