Hi, everyone! I’m new to this forum.

First of all, a brief introduction about me. I’ve been living in the States almost 10 years during which I spent most in the schools and part-time jobs. Now I work at home but trying to find a job and now I’m afraid my writing skill isn’t good enough for Cover Letter and Resume. My academic background didn’t require much of extensive writings in English, and I’m aware of my writings are often very strange sounding even with correct grammar.
So I would greatly appreciate if you take a time to look at my cover letter and resume and give me correction suggestions and healthy criticism.

Oh, I found the name of Director of Human Resources of the Company I’m applying. It is obviously a woman’s name (Iris), but I’m not sure she’s single/married/divorced (is Ms. Ok?). Also, in the last section of the resume, I stated that I WAS a member of SME and ASME. Should I get rid of it or not now that I’m not a member anymore?

Many thanks in advance.


Cover Letter


My Address
City, State Zip code
My email address

September 26, 2007

Director of Human Resources
ABC Company
City, State Zip code

Dear Ms. BBBB:

From ABC Company’s web site, I learned about the training program for college graduates. I’m very interested in this program with ABC Company especially in Programming, Production/Engineering and Newsroom Departments, and I believe that my strong academic background and motivation are appropriate for this training program position.

While working toward my bachelor’s degree, I was employed as an intern for Water Department of B City, B State for two consecutive semesters. I assisted Engineers with their daily task including administrative tasks, agenda/presentation preparations and technical calculation tasks. I was also in charge of converting old data into digital form and successfully converted 2 year worth of data during my stay as an intern.

In addition to internship, my experience also includes working part-times in food/service field. Because of the small size of these businesses, I have been exposed to and participated in many aspects of managing a business, including marketing and inventory management. More importantly, I learned the importance of working as a team.

I believe that the combination of my education, interpersonal skill, ability to learn fast and ability to work in a fast paced environment is well-suited to the training program, enabling me to pursue a career in the broadcasting field. I look forward to talking with you regarding this training program position with ABC Company. I have enclosed a copy of my resume with additional information about my qualifications. Within the next two weeks I will contact you to confirm that you received my email and resume and to answer any questions you may have.

Thank you for your consideration.


My Name

= Resume

My Name

Address, City, State Zip code

XXX-XXX-XXXX ▪ email address


A trainee position in the broadcasting field where superb creativity, organization and communication skills are required.


· Engineer internship with B City, B State.

· Graduated with a 3.57/4 general GPA, 3.77/4 in major.

· Proficient with MS Office and Internet.

· Detail oriented, dedicated and independently motivated and organized.

· Strong analytical and creative problem solving skills.

· Able to learn new thing quickly and willing to work weekends.


Bachelor of Science in Mechanical Engineering May 2001

A University, B City, B State

B University, S City, S State 2002 - 2005

· Completed 30 hours towards a Master of Science in Mechanical Engineering.


Engineer Internship May 2000 – December 2000

City of B, Water Department, B City, B State

· Assisted Engineers with their daily duties including administrative and technical tasks.

· Assisted field crews conducting inspections, flow measuring, sewer cameraing and other routine field operations.

· Responsible for data documenting of aged blue prints.

Data Technician Summer of 1994, 1995, 1996 and 1997

CC Prepress Company, Seoul, Republic of Korea

· Responsible for managing digital data from over 100 publishing companies.

· Assisted in Quality Control on prepress materials.

Activities and Honors

· Achieved Boeing Scholarship, SME (Society of Manufacturing Engineers) Education Foundation 2000 Scholarship, Electronics Representative Association Scholarship and several University Departmental Scholarships.

· Awarded President’s List.

· Membership with SME and ASME (American Society of Mechanical Engineers).

· Invited Member of X Alpha X Engineering Society.

· Awarded 2nd place for departmental Bridge Design Contest.

· Selected best 3D design in AutoCAD class.
Ms is fine

You should certainly not mention any memberships that are now out of date.

Your letter - you don't mention that you are applying for a job; from your first sentence it sounds as though you want to join the programme as a student. The cover letter doesn't need any detail about your previous roles - that should be clear from your CV - but should emphasise your enthusiasm and personal skills for the role.

Education should be listed with the most recent items first.
Your resume

The summary section is a rather odd mix of different types of information. It's a waste of space to summarise information that is found elsewhere in the CV, just write a brief paragraph on your aims and personal qualities etc, and this section is often entitled 'Personal Profile' or something similar. I would include your scholarship information in the education section.

cameraing - find a better (real) word.