The graph compares the value of three companies which sold farming equipment every five years since 1960 and its projection from 2007 to 2012. They were Greenacres Ltd, Farm Implements Ltd and Carsons Ltd and the values were in thousands of dollars.

Overall, there was an upward trend in the values of Farm Implements Ltd and Carsons Ltd. Greenacres Ltd, after a fall, was expected to considerably rise again.

At the beginning of the period, the value of Greenacres Ltd started from $2000 thousand, which was four times the number of Carsons Ltd ($500 thousand). From 1960 to 1990, the value of Greenacres Ltd had grown considerably with the highest peak of $4000 thousand in 1990. Meanwhile, Carsons Ltd’s value increased once every five years. The number it had in 1985 doubled the one in 1960 (over $1000 thousand). It was not until 1980 that Carsons Ltd started to join the trade. From $1000 thousand in 1980, the figure of this new company rose to nearly 2000 thousand in 1990.

Between 1990 and 2000, the growing trend still occurred to the value of Farm Implements Ltd. It gradually grew to approximately $2700 thousand in 2000. In contrast, Greenacres Ltd had a decreasing value which was about 3200 thousand in 1995 and 2000 thousand in 2000. Carsons Ltd’s figures had some slight changes and the number was 1250 thousand in 2000.

All three companies were projected to have their values increased continually from 2007 to 2012. It was expected that Greenacres Ltd’s value would be $4000 thousand in 2012. In the same year, Farm Implements Ltd would worth $3500 thousand and Carsons Ltd was likely to have the lowest figure of $1250 thousand.

The graph compares the value of three companies which sold farming equipment every five years since 1960 and its projection from 2007 to 2012. They were Greenacres Ltd, Farm Implements Ltd and Carsons Ltd and the values were in thousands of dollars.

("sold farm equipment every five years" means that the company only sold equipment in one out of five years.)


Model paragraph:

The bar graph gives the values in thousands of dollars of three farm equipment companies during the period from 1960 to 2000, with a data point shown every five years. It then gives their projected values in three years: 2007, 2010 and 2012. The companies were Greenacres Ltd, Farm Implements Ltd and Carsons Ltd.


Overall, there was an upward trend in the values of Farm Implements Ltd and Carsons Ltd. Greenacres Ltd, after a fall, was expected to considerably rise again.

At the beginning of the period, the value of Greenacres Ltd started from $2000 thousand, (wrong expression. We always write the word for the highest place value. The expression "Two thousand thousand" is never used. You have made this mistake throughout the report.) which was four times the number that of Carsons Ltd ($500 thousand). From 1960 to 1990, the value of Greenacres Ltd had grown considerably with a the highest peak of $4000 thousand 4 million dollars in 1990. Meanwhile, Carsons Ltd’s value increased once every five years. (wrong expression - That means that it stayed constant for 4 years, and then jumped in the fifth year. ) The value number it had in 1985 doubled the one in was double that of 1960 (over $1000 thousand). It was not until 1980 that Carsons Ltd started to join the trading. From $1000 thousand in 1980, the its value figure of this new company rose to nearly 2000 thousand in 1990.

Between 1990 and 2000, the growing trend still occurred in to the value of Farm Implements Ltd. It gradually grew to approximately $2700 thousand $2.7 million in 2000. In contrast, Greenacres Ltd had a decreasing value which was about 3200 thousand in 1995 and 2000 thousand in 2000. Carsons Ltd’s figures (wrong word) had some slight changes and it the number was 1250 thousand in 2000.

All three companies were projected to have their values increased (wrong form) continually from 2007 to 2012. It was expected that Greenacres Ltd’s value would be $4000 thousand in 2012. In the same year, Farm Implements Ltd would be worth $3500 thousand and Carsons Ltd was likely to have the lowest figure (wrong word) of $1250 thousand.


Vocabulary: figure

In math and science reports, a figure is a diagram, graph or illustration in the text. Figures are numbered and referenced in the report.

We do not normally use "figure" to mean a data value, so avoid using the word "figure" in Task 1. You are writing about a figure, which might contain two pie charts, two maps, or a combination of charts and graphs.


Thank you for letting me know these mistakes. I have rewritten my essay. Could you check it again for me, please?

And in this essay, which words can I use instead of "value"?

The graph compares the values in thousands of dollars of three farming equipment companies: Farm Implements Ltd, Greenacres Ltd and Carsons Ltd every five years from 1960 to 2000. It also shows their projected values in 2007, 2010 and 2012.

Overall, there was an upward trend in the values of Farm Implements Ltd and Carsons Ltd. Greenacres Ltd, after a fall, was expected to rise again.

At the beginning of the period, the value of Greenacres Ltd started from 2 million dollars, which was four times that of Carsons Ltd (500,000 dollars). From 1960 to 1990, the value of Greenacres Ltd had grown considerably with a peak of 4 million dollars in 1990. Meanwhile, between 1960 and 1965, Carsons Ltd’s value increased and then dropped in the next five years. Its values kept changing that way until the end of the period. Noticeably, the value it had in 1985 was double that of 1960 (over $1 million). It was not until 1980 that Carsons Ltd started trading. From $1 million in 1980, its value rose to nearly 2 million dollars in 1990.

Between 1990 and 2000, the growing trend still occurred in the value of Farm Implements Ltd. It gradually grew to approximately $2.7 million in 2000. In contrast, Greenacres Ltd had a decreasing value which was about $3.2 million in 1995 and $2 million in 2000. Carsons Ltd’s value had some slight changes and it was 1.25 million dollars in 2000.

The values of all three companies were projected to increase from 2007 to 2012. It was expected that Greenacres Ltd’s value would be $4 milllion in 2012. In the same year, Farm Implements Ltd would be worth $3.5 million and Carsons Ltd was likely to have the lowest value of $1.25 million.

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maihueThank you for letting me know these mistakes. I have rewritten my essay.

You did not rewrite it in your own words. You just copied the model.

"net worth" is a synonym of "value" but you should learn to use pronouns. The purpose of a pronoun is to avoid repeating a noun.

Yes, thank you. I'll try again.