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Here is my topic: (Source: Cambridge IELTS Practice - Test 1)


The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words


It can be seen from two charts the changes in the percentage of households in one country with electrical appliances and the number of hours they spent doing housework from 1920 to 2019. Overall, there are more and more households that chose to use electrical appliances, which contributed to the reduction in the amount of time they spent on housework.

In the first chart, from 1930 to 1960, all the three appliances saw dramatic growth in the percentage of households. Most remarkably, the percentage in using refrigerators which started at the lowest point of 0% in 1920 shot up to 90% in 1960. After 1960, the ownership of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners continued to rise more gently until reaching their maximum level in 1980 and 2000 respectively and then remained unchanged afterward. Unlike these two, there was a slight decrease in the number of households using washing machines from 1960 to 1980 and its highest point only stayed at about 73%.

With more people using electrical appliances, the amount of time spent on housework, as a result, continuously decreased within the whole period. Unlike the first chart, from 1920 to 1960, the time people spent doing housework. After 1960, it continued to plunge but more steadily.

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Task 1 is a test of your ability to describe mathematical plots, diagrams, maps or flow charts.

You are suppose to report the information, without opinions, recommendations, interpretations or conclusions. It is best to use neutral, unemotional, dispassionate words and descriptions that would be acceptable to a university professor in science, engineering or math.

So the vocabulary for Task 1 is very specialized, and different from Task 2, in which you express an opinion.

This is a difficult skill to learn and it takes a lot of practice.

Please read my advice for Task 1 essays. It has advice on vocabulary and structure, in particular words that are frequently misused.

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It can be seen from two charts (wrong word. Learn the proper names of the figures.) the changes in the percentage of households in one country with electrical appliances (Not very good English - what are these appliances? There is more than one on the graph.) and the number of hours they spent doing housework from 1920 to 2019. (You have changed the paragraph topic, so you must start a new paragraph.) Overall, there are more and more households that chose to use electrical appliances, which contributed to the reduction in the amount of time they spent on housework. (That is a deduction of conclusion. Do not write these kinds of things in Task 1. You are supposed to describe the information as presented without any inferences, assumptions, deductions or conclusions. )

In the first chart, from 1930 to 1960, all the three (You have not told the reader what these are.) appliances saw (Appliances cannot see things - especially they cannot see percentages..) dramatic growth in the percentage of households. Most remarkably, (That is an opinion. Do not write opinion words in Task 1) the percentage in using refrigerators which started at the lowest point of 0% in 1920 shot up (Do not use dramatic descriptions in Task1. Besides it did not go from 0-90 in one year. ) to 90% in 1960. After 1960, the ownership of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners continued to rise more gently until reaching their maximum level in 1980 and 2000 respectively and then remained unchanged afterward. Unlike these two, there was a slight decrease in the number of households using washing machines from 1960 to 1980 and its highest point was only stayed at about 73%.


With more people using electrical appliances, the amount of time spent on housework, as a result, continuously decreased within the whole period. Unlike the first chart, from 1920 to 1960, the time people spent doing housework. (Not a sentence ) After 1960, it continued to plunge (not a good word.) but more steadily.

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The first line graph plots the percentage of homes in a particular country which have a refrigerator, vacuum cleaner or washing machine in the 100-year period between 1920 and 2019. The second line graph shows the average hours spent weekly doing chores per household during the same period.

Overall, more and more families acquired these appliances, especially vacuum cleaners and refrigerators. There is a very strong negative correlation between the percentage of homes with a refrigerator and the number of hours devoted to household chores.

In detail, owning a refrigerator started from nearly none in 1920, but every home had one by 1980. About three in ten homes had a vacuum cleaner in 1920, and this increased to every home by 2000. Washing machines were less prevalent, starting out with the highest ownership of the three, 40%, in 1920, but did not reach 100% as the other two did. Its maximum value was about 75% in 2019. As more households acquired these appliances, less time was spent on chores. The number of hours per week dropped from 50 to 10 hours/week.