Dear, Sir and Ma'am! Please help me evaluate the writing for IELTS WRITING TASK 2. Thank you a lot!

Here is my topic: (Source: Cambridge IELTS Practice 16 - Test 1)

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Nowadays, it has been observed that people tend to be more concerned about delving into the past of their accommodation. Many people think that it is because of curiosity but I believe there are more pragmatic explanations. Within the scope of this writing, I will discuss two reasons for this tendency/phenomenon and how to look for the information.

As for the reasons, firstly, I think learning about the history of the house will make it convenient for the new owners when they want to alter parts of the building. Knowing what the building was built of, how it was used and what had been altered will guide them to use suitable materials and methods to prevent unnecessary mendings or irreparable damage to the original features. For example, if the previous owner has already repaired the clogged drain then the new one does not have to worry and waste money on that problem anymore. Moreover, if they ever want to put their house on the market, they will have a foundation to evaluate its price and negotiate with the buyers. Secondly, just like it is obviously necessary for consumers to read the product’s label carefully before buying, when having knowledge about who lived in their house and what had happened in the past, the current owners will have more sense of possession and feel guaranteed and more comfortable when living there. Also, it can help them adapt to the environment easier.

For all these reasons, there are 3 main ways to look for the history of your accommodation. The first method is to ask for information from the previous owners and neighbors who have lived there for a longer time than you. The pro is that you can easily find as much information as you want to know without any costs, time and effort. However, what you hear may not be completely genuine. You must analyze what you heard carefully and do your own research online to reconfirm, which is the second method I want to discuss. Thanks to the rapid development of the Internet and social networking, in today’s modern world, searching for information online can be just in the blink of an eye, but you also need to filter what you really need since there are plentiful data available. The last approach is coming to your competent local authorities to ask for legal information related to the house. The information you get is obviously reliable but the process will be much more complicated.

In conclusion, I think the increase in the number of people who want to ascertain their house’s past is cause for two main reasons and there are three main ways for them to carry out such researches.

You have written over 450 words.

The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high band scores. And there are many reasons for this.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.

Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task response or coherence and cohesion.

Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. Do not write about things that are not specifically given in the task. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even lose your direction and contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples and personal experiences. It is much better to have two well-developed and fleshed-out argument points than to have four which are just individual separate statements.

Fourth, you will spend a lot of time writing, and not have sufficient time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, which everyone makes, and that lowers your score.

Fifth, you will not have enough time for Task 1, and get a lower score there. You should allow 40 minutes for task and 20 minutes for Task 1. The word counts are designed so that you have ample time for brainstorming and then writing the two parts.

Aim to write around 270 words for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.

Since you have written too many words, I will focus on reducing the verbosity. Verbosity means writing too many words so that the idea is not clearly stated.

The highest-scoring essays use appropriate and precise vocabulary words and clear and concise language. There is a seamless flow of ideas, and they are developed with examples and personal experiences.

In this case your essay is a little bit off topic. The history of a house may include who lived there before, and were there any interesting events that happened in it. Some homes, especially in the UK, are more than 300 years old. There are many stories about who lived there, and if they were famous people, and if anyone died in the house. Are there any ghosts roaming the attic? Is there some buried treasure in the back garden?

You can develop your ideas much better. Instead of having three or four argument points, have one with good examples.



Nowadays, it has been observed that people tend to be more concerned about delving into the past of their accommodation. Many people think that it is because of curiosity but I believe there are more pragmatic straightforward explanations. Within the scope of this writing, I will discuss two reasons for this tendency/phenomenon and how to look for the information.

Never mention your essay or your writing. The examiner knows you are writing an essay. They know the topic. Do not repeat the instructions. Write a thesis statement. The thesis statement briefly answers the essay prompts.

e.g.

If a homeowner knows the details of their house's construction, they will encounter fewer problems doing repairs. There are several sources where they can get this information such as previous owners, neighbors, or social media.


As for the reasons, firstly, I think learning about the history of the house will make it convenient for the new owners when they want to renovate or modernize. alter parts of the building. Knowing what the original construction materials and previous modifications building was built of, how it was used and what had been altered will guide them to use suitable materials and methods to prevent unnecessary mendings or irreparable damage to the original features. For example, if the previous owner has already repaired cleared a the clogged drain then the new one does not have to worry and waste money on that problem anymore. Moreover, if they ever want to put their house on the market, they will have a foundation for evaluating to evaluate its price and negotiate with the buyers. Secondly, just like it is obviously necessary for consumers to read the product’s label carefully before buying, when having knowledge about who lived in their house and what had happened in the past, the current owners will have more sense of possession and feel guaranteed and more comfortable when living there. Also, it can help them adapt to the environment easier.


For all these reasons, there are 3 three main ways to look for the history of your home. accommodation. The first method is to ask for information from the previous owners and neighbors who have lived there for a longer time than you. The pro is that You can easily find as much information as you want to know without any costs, time and effort. However, what you hear may not be completely accurate or correct. genuine. You must analyze what you heard carefully and do your own research online to reconfirm. The city council's website or the local historical society may have relevant background information. which is the second method I want to discuss. Thanks to the rapid development of the Internet and social networking, in today’s modern world, searching for information online can be just in the blink of an eye, but you also need to filter what you really need since there are plentiful data available. (That is off-topic.) The last approach is coming to your competent searching the deed records local authorities to ask for legal information related to the house. The information you get is obviously reliable but the process will take more time. be much more complicated.

In conclusion, I think the increase in the number of people who want to investigate ascertain their house’s past is due to their desire to modernize or repair it is cause for two main reasons and there are three main sources for the information. ways for them to carry out such researches.

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