Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a
positive or negative development?
Nowadays, there is a sizable number of tertiary educational institutions decide to promote distance-learning by posting their syllabuses on various websites. I hold the belief that this is an advantageous development.
To begin with, by allowing people to access to university`s courses via the Internet, a lot of financial burden on learners will be reduced significantly. To be specific, an individual has to pay a huge sum for fuel and the usage of facilities at university such as library, classroom if they follow traditional program. For example, numerous students in Viet Nam can’t focus on studying since they have to work while studying at college to make ends meet. Thus, studying online minimizes people`s burden correlated to finance and help them to concentrate on their studying.
In addition, concerns in relation to geographical boundary will be eradicated if college`s courses are offered on the Internet. For instance, learners who want to gain education from a foreign university don’t have to allocate budget on travelling due to the fact they can still gain knowledge from online courses that the university provides. Moreover, because of the flexibility of remote learning, people might feel more convenient. On other words, they can study at the comfort of their home and they aren’t be bound to a fixed timetable. For example, if a person has a vital appointment in the morning, he can temporarily postpone his studying and continue to study at night.
In conclusion, I believe that providing curriculums on the Internet is a reasonable and beneficial choice for universities.
First, you barely wrote the minimum number of words. Aim for 270-300 words for task 2.
Nowadays, there is (wrong verb form) a sizable number of tertiary (This includes vocational schools and colleges, not just universities.) educational institutions decide to promote distance-learning by posting their syllabuses (wrong word. A syllabus is a text document listing and outlining the subjects to be covered in a course. It is not the lectures themselves.) on various websites.] (ungrammatical sentence. The words in the blue brackets make a main clause. A main clause cannot be used as the object of a reposition, in this case "of") I hold the belief that this is an advantageous development.
To begin with, by allowing people to access to (wrong usage. You are mixing up the proper usage of the verb "access" and the noun "access") university`s courses via the Internet, a lot of the financial burden on students learners (very poor word choice. "Learners" is not a good synonym for "students" ) will be reduced significantly. To be specific, an individual has to pay a huge ("Huge" is a word for little children's books. Learn higher level words for academic essays) significant sum for fuel (?? explain. Many students can walk to school. ) and the usage of facilities at university such as library, classroom (wrong grammar. Missing conjunction.) if they follow traditional program. For example, numerous many students in Viet Nam can’t (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) focus on studying since they have to work while studying at college to make ends meet. Thus, studying online minimizes people`s costs burden correlated (wrong word) to finance and help them to concentrate on their studying.
In addition, concerns in relation to geographical boundary (poor English - Usually we are not worried about the borders between districts and countries) will be eradicated if college`s (wrong form. In the UK, a college is not a university. The words are not synonyms. In the US, they are synonyms, but do not use them randomly in an essay. It ruins coherence and cohesion. ) courses are offered on the Internet. For instance, learners (wrong word) who want to gain education (wrong collocation, wrong word) from a foreign university don’t have to allocate budget on for travelling. They due to the fact they can still gain credits for knowledge from online courses that the university provides. Moreover, because of the flexibility of remote learning, people might feel more convenient. (wrong word. ) On (wrong word. ) other words, they can study at the comfort of their home and they aren’t be bound to a fixed timetable. (wrong word. ) For example, if a person has a vital appointment in the morning, he can skip the morning lecture, and watch it later in the day. temporarily postpone his studying and continue to study at night.
In conclusion, I believe that providing curriculums (wrong word. ) on the Internet is a reasonable and beneficial choice for universities.
