Hi, this is my first attempt at writing task 1. Request review and suggestions please.



The bar graph clearly shows different types of transport used by young people from four different countries. Car seems to be preferred mode of transport in three out of four countries of the survey.

There are about half as many young people in Great Britain who prefer bicycle usage as that of car users. About 10 percent people use motorcycle as conveyance. The percentages of car users are same in Great Britain and USA. USA has the highest percentage of motorcycle users among all four countries with 30%. German young people have similar preferences between cars and bicycles as their mode of transport. France records the highest percentage of car users among all countries in survey. Young people in France share similar interests in using motorcycle and bicycle.

To sum it up, France youngsters prefer car and Germans choose bicycle as their favorite transportation with Great Britain and USA inclining towards cars as well.

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Where is the bar chart?

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I am sorry. I thought i attached it but seems like post didn't copy it.


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Rekha.S.R

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I am sorry, i am new here and i dont seem to quite get how to attach images. I have done this twice now but somehow cant see it though.

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I am sorry, but i am new to this website and somehow dont seem to get add comment option on my post. Please find attached the bar graph.


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The bar graph clearly shows different types of transport used by young people from four different countries. Car (wrong form) seems to be preferred mode of transport in three out of four countries of the survey.

There are about half as many young people in Great Britain who prefer bicycle usage as that of car users. (bad English. Do they prefer bicycles, not people (who drive cars)? The correct phrasing is "prefer bicycles over cars" or prefer to ride a bicycle rather than to ride in or drive a car.) . About 10 percent (missing words) people use (missing word) motorcycle as (missing word) conveyance. The percentages of car users are same in Great Britain and (missing word) USA. (missing word) USA has the highest percentage of motorcycle users among all four countries with 30%. German young people have similar preferences between cars and bicycles as their mode of transport. France records the highest percentage of car users among all countries in (missing word) survey. Young people in France share similar interests in using motorcycle (wrong form)and bicycle. (wrong form)

To sum it up, France youngsters prefer car (wrong form) and Germans choose bicycle (wrong form) as their favorite transportation with Great Britain and USA inclining towards cars as well.

Thanks a lot for the comments. I will work on them to improve. On an IELTS scale of 10 marks, i assume i may stand at 4 or a max of 5 as of now. Please let me know if you think otherwise.

RekhaSROn an IELTS scale of 10 marks

The highest band for IELTS is 9. That is the writing of a native English speaker with a good writing skills.

There are 4 criteria for scoring Task 1 ( Task 2 has the same categories):

  1. Task Achievement (How well did the student follow the instructions and stay on-topic? How completely and accurately did they observe the graphic and not introduce conclusions or opinions. )
  2. Coherence and Cohesion (How well did the student organize the writing and logically present their arguments? How did the ideas flow from one point to the next?)
  3. Lexical Resource (How well did the student demonstrate their knowledge of vocabulary words? The best score demonstrates a wide range of vocabulary applied fluently and flexibly to convey precise meanings.)
  4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy (How well does the student write error-free sentences with a range of structures? The best score shows a range of simple, compound, complex, and compound-complex structures.)

Source: https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/sites/default/files/IELTS_task_1_Writing_band_descriptors.pdf


Each category gets a score from 0 to 9, and they are averaged to get an overall score, rounded to the nearest 0.5.

I am not an official scorer, but you would have a fairly uniform score over the 4 categories. I would say a solid 5.

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