Question: Some people think that hosting international sports events is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Essay

It is true whether or not the country should take the responsibility of hosting a sport-mega event sparked a heated debate. Although some people opine that the country's economy is provided with a boost in the light of organizing global sporting events, I am an advocate of the statement that those sporting events inflict many detrimental effects on the host country. This essay will first discuss both views and then give some reasons substantiating my point of view.

On the one hand, an international sports event brings about benefit to the domestic economy of the host country. An underlying principle of the auspicious rise in the economy is the inbound tourists coming from all corners of the world to attend a historic event. This is clearly exemplified in the case of the 2008 Summer Olympics taken place in Beijing, China. This one-off event attracted a large array of athletes and their supporters worldwide; accordingly, proliferated the sales of products and service such as accommodation and transportation within the period of the events. Besides, tourists gradually grow fond of the surroundings and thus facilitating cultural exchanges between Chinese and other civilisations of the world.

On the other hand, big sporting events do not invariably translate into profitable economic benefits. One inevitable disadvantage is that a host nation may sell sports professionals and enthusiasts down the river due to the lack of infrastructure. A far-reaching event pertains to numerous investment of the host in revitalising the cities. On top of that is the forward-looking event can be plagued by the deplorable preparation of the host country. Another disadvantage mainly boils down to a series of deadly incidents caused by hooligans. For instance, thousands of participants in World Cup 2018 borne witness to the violent clashes between Russian hooligans and English sports fans. Despite the attempt of the government to disperse the aggressive crowd that they had congregated, Russian fans continued to hurl abuse at the English ones. It is undeniable that this event was deemed to be a hotbed of threats and violence and depict a hostile image of Russia.

In conclusion, notwithstanding the lucrative benefits of boosted sales and cultural promotion, I am convinced that being the host of sports events comes at the expense of dire consequences related to a major overhaul of the host cities and the hazard of hooligans brawling uncontrollably again.

Question: Some people think that hosting international sports events is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Essay

It is true whether or not the country should take the responsibility of hosting a sport-mega event sparked a heated debate. Although some people opine that the country's economy is provided with a boost in the light of organizing global sporting events, I am an advocate of the statement that those sporting events inflict many detrimental effects on the host country. This essay will first discuss both views and then give some reasons substantiating my point of view.

On the one hand, an international sports event brings about benefit to the domestic economy of the host country. An underlying principle of the auspicious rise in the economy is the inbound tourists coming from all corners of the world to attend a historic event. This is clearly exemplified in the case of the 2008 Summer Olympics taken place in Beijing, China. This one-off event attracted a large array of athletes and their supporters worldwide; accordingly, proliferated the sales of products and service such as accommodation and transportation within the period of the events. Besides, tourists gradually grow fond of the surroundings and thus facilitating cultural exchanges between Chinese and other civilisations of the world.

On the other hand, big sporting events do not invariably translate into profitable economic benefits. One inevitable disadvantage is that a host nation may sell sports professionals and enthusiasts down the river due to the lack of infrastructure. A far-reaching event pertains to numerous investment of the host in revitalising the cities. On top of that is the forward-looking event can be plagued by the deplorable preparation of the host country. Another disadvantage mainly boils down to a series of deadly incidents caused by hooligans. For instance, thousands of participants in World Cup 2018 borne witness to the violent clashes between Russian hooligans and English sports fans. Despite the attempt of the government to disperse the aggressive crowd that they had congregated, Russian fans continued to hurl abuse at the English ones. It is undeniable that this event was deemed to be a hotbed of threats and violence and depict a hostile image of Russia.

In conclusion, notwithstanding the lucrative benefits of boosted sales and cultural promotion, I am convinced that being the host of sports events comes at the expense of dire consequences related to a major overhaul of the host cities and the hazard of hooligans brawling uncontrollably again.

You did not follow the advice that I gave you in the last essay; instead you went in the opposite direction! So I will repeat the advice here.

You wrote almost 400 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high scores. There are many reasons.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.

Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task completion or coherence and cohesion.

Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples.

Fourth, you will take a lot of time writing, and not have time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, and that lowers your score.


Fifth, you will not have enough time to spend on Task 1, and get a lower score there.

Aim to write around 270 words for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.

In particular, your writing is verbose, and you use words or expressions you do not understand very well.
You have to practice the opening paragraph and thesis statement.



It is true whether or not the country should take the responsibility of hosting a sport-mega event sparked a heated debate.

This is not a grammatical sentence. I cannot even figure out what it means.

There is no "heated debate". There is not mention of any responsibility, only making a choice to host a sporting event.

"Sport-mega event" is not a good phrase.

You are trying to write very high-level sophisticated sentence, but it backfires terribly.

If you are asked for an opinion, do not write that there is a controversy or debate - there is not. It is only asking for you to take one side and defend your opinion. Write a simple, direct sentence so that the examiner knows you have understood the topic.

e.g. This paragraph gives the two sides of the argument, and then adds which one you agree with.

Countries compete to host major athletic events such as the Olympics because of the prestige and potential income from tourists. However, some people observe that it can be a financial disaster to do so and it is disruptive to the ordinary citizen's lives. I wholeheartedly agree with them.


Although some people opine (This is a very odd and rarely used word. I cannot think of an instance that I have ever used it myself. Do not use it.) that the country's economy is provided with a boost in the light of organizing global sporting events, I believe am an advocate of the statement that (Those extra words make your sentence very verbose and awkward.) those sporting events inflict many detrimental effects on the host country. This essay will first discuss both views and then give some reasons substantiating my point of view.

Never mention your essay. The examiner knows you are writing an essay. They know that you will present your arguments. Do not tell them what they know already! Instead, write what they do not know, which is your opinion - that tells the examiner the main point of your essay. You will get a much better score.


On the one hand, an international sports event brings about benefit to the domestic can benefit the economy of the host country. An underlying principle of the auspicious rise in the economy is the inbound tourists coming from all corners of the world to attend a historic event. This is clearly exemplified in the case of the 2008 Summer Olympics taken place in Beijing, China. This one-off event attracted a large array of (awkward, unnatural) the world's most talented athletes and their supporters worldwide; accordingly, proliferated (wrong word) the sales of products and service (wrong form) such as accommodation hotel rooms, restaurants and transportation within the period of the events. Besides, tourists gradually grow fond of the surroundings and thus facilitating cultural exchanges between Chinese and other civilisations (wrong word) of the world.

On the other hand, big sporting events do not invariably translate into profitable economic benefits. One inevitable (wrong word) disadvantage is that a host nation may sell sports professionals and enthusiasts down the river (wrong usage - do not use idioms unless you are absolutely sure that you are using them correctly ) due to the lack of infrastructure. A far-reaching event pertains to numerous (wrong word) investment of the host in revitalising the cities. On top of that is the forward-looking (wrong expression) event can be plagued by the deplorable preparation of the host country. Another disadvantage mainly boils down to a series of deadly incidents caused by hooligans. For instance, thousands of participants in World Cup 2018 borne (wrong form) witness to the violent clashes between Russian hooligans and English sports fans. Despite the attempt of the government to disperse the aggressive crowd that they had congregated, Russian fans continued to hurl abuse at the English ones. It is undeniable that this event was deemed to be a hotbed of threats and violence and depict (wrong form) a hostile image of Russia.

In conclusion, notwithstanding the lucrative benefits of boosted sales and cultural promotion, I am convinced that being the host of sports events comes at the expense of dire consequences related to a major overhaul of the host cities and the hazard of hooligans brawling uncontrollably again.