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Hallo, could you please have a look and correct my spell and grammar mistakes. Thank you very much!

Dear Madame, Dear Sir,

I am very glad to be at the point to assess my field research experience in .., Nepal and to thank you for the chance you have given me, by granting me with a.. scholarship.

Since I started the Master Program "......." my wish to work in the field of development and international cooperation has been growing stronger and firmer.
During my Master studies I could enjoy friendly, international academic environment where I was able to gather both professional and personal experiences. I, however, was lacking the practical knowledge, so important for my future career.

Talking about the numerous problems in the developing world, stating statistical data and preparing presentations is one, but for me now, it is all worthless until a person experiences it himself/herself. This is what has happened with me, and this is why I say "Thank you".

The topic of my Master thesis is "...........". I started reading about the theme of my work four months before my trip to Nepal and I was convinced in my theoretical knowledge. Shortly after I arrived in .., however, my world turned around. I have never been in a developing country before and what I have seen and lived through during my filed research in Nepal is an experience for life. Suddenly, all statistical numbers and percentages have acquired a real form and meaning to me, and words like: poverty, disaster, risk and vulnerability have turned into vivid and dramatic images.
Nepal is one of the poorest countries in the world, and the poorest in South-East Asia. More than 77 % of the population lives below the international poverty line of US$ 2 per day, and some 55 % survives on less than US$ 1.25 per day. Nevertheless, I could hardly realize the meaning of these, before I saw it myself.

Without the financial support of ..I would have not been able to afford myself the field research in Nepal. I would have most probably written paper-based master thesis and I would have graduated the master program on a theoretical base.
But to me, it is this unforgettable practical experience that matters; it is the chance to see, feel and realize situations and conditions I have never witnessed before; it is the chance to really understand what developing world means; to observe and analyze the obstacles and constrains of this world towards development and to search for solutions and opportunities.

Thanks to .. and the its MSc field research scholarship, I believe, I have become not only a better specialist but a better person, too
Now, I am convinced that I have found the field of work that fits me well, and I am keen to embrace the new challenges in my professional and personal life.
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Uf, again some difficulties with the post. I guess i need some more time Emotion: smile Please excuse me.
innna
Dear CU scholarship selection committee,

I am writing to you to thank you for granting me with a MSc Scholarship, which has enabled me to conduct field research in Pokhara, Nepal.

I am very glad to be at the point to assess my field research experience in Pokhara, Nepal and to thank you for the chance you have given me, by granting me with a MSc scholarship.

Since I began started the Master Program at CU, my desire wish to work in the field of development and international cooperation has grown been growing and getting firmer.

During my Master studies I enjoyed a friendly, international academic environment where I developed personally and professionally. was able to gather both professional and personal experiences.

I was strongly encouraged to read about the problems in the developing world and to prepared presentations and protocols. During my studies this process, I built a solid base of theoretical knowledge; I, however, although I lacked was missing the practical experience, which is so important for my professional and personal development growing.

Thanks to CU (You alread said in your opening paragraph they gave you a MSc grant. It is now understood.) With your kind assistance and the MSc scholarship I was granted with, I was able to travel to Nepal and collect my first field observations.

I have never been in a developing country before and what I have seen and lived through during my research in Nepal is an experience for life. Suddenly, all statistical numbers and percentages have acquired a real form and meaning to me, and words like: poverty, disaster, risk and vulnerability have turned into vivid and dramatic images.
Nepal is one of the least developed countries in the world; hardly could I realize the meaning of this, before I saw it myself.

Below is an alternative. See if you like it. Feel free to change it.

Because I have never set foot in a developing country before, I was surprised by my Nepal experience. Statistical data took new meaning as I was able to meet and talk with people. Technical terms such as poverty, disaster, risk, and vulnerability have meaning to me now. I now have vivid images of what these words mean. Being one of the least developoed countries in the world, Nepal taught me more during my brief visit than I could ever have hoped to achieve from studying books and journals.

With the financial support of CU and through my work in Nepal I have better understood what a developing world means.

With my stronger understanding, I have learned to observe and analyze specific problems and to search for their solutions. Not only has this entire experience helped me academically, but it has helped me personally, too, as I have grown emotionally.

Now, I am convinced that I have found the field of work that fits me well and I am keen to embrace the new challenges in my professional and personal life.

I strongly appreciate the given to me opportunity you have given me.

Thank you.

Sincerely,

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Thank you, it is really much better now. I like some of the expressions you have used. I will remember them for future use.
Greetings and again thank you for your help and advice.
innna