Please read the wedding vows that I have created for my future husband. I want them to be perfect and I'm not the best in English.

Mark, from the first time I saw your face I knew that I would spend the rest of my life with you. I never realized it but I was lost until I found you. You are my heaven. I am so grateful to have you in my life. A simple glance from you can make my heart dance. I don’t know how you do it but you can make the sun shine on the cloudiest days. I can’t wait to make thousands of amazing memories with you. Throughout our days together we will come upon hurdles but I know that we will overcome anything as long as you are by my side. I’ll know that I’ll always be safe if I’m in your arms.

We’ve walked through our lives as individuals but now we are united as one. Today as you become my husband, my feet will dance because of you, my heart will beat because of you, my eyes will see because of you, my mind will think because of you, and I shall love because of you.

I vow to you in front of God, our family, and friends, that I will love, cherish, and honor you for eternity. Through the days as we celebrate our love for one another I will also be thanking you for being my shining star.
I read it over carefully. In my opinion, it is flawless. What you've written is lovely and touching. I'm sure you'll have a wonderful future with your husband-to-be.
Gosh, this is so beautiful, as it is written it sounds so true, so real, so deeply moving. Gosh, as a true romantic I don't want to get carried away! It makes my hair stand on end.
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