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hey everyone ,
I found yesterday a list of ielts writing topics , so i chose one of this list and i'll share it with you , the topic 's 'Marketing and promotion is the key to a successful business , to what extend do you agree?'

I would like to write a pragragh about this topic and it's pleasure to me to correct mine.

My paragragh :

If we analyse person's caracterics , we'll find that his abilities to buy either cothes foods or something else grow up with the promise price /quality. Also we know that products high qualities are so expensive so The best strategy that follow all sellers are to reduce prices in a specific period in order to attract more customers numbers .
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First, you need to get your spelling right. When you were typing out "caracterics", the spell checker would have put a red line underneath it. You have other spelling mistakes there, but I'll let you discover those.

Second, the only bit I think I understand from your paragraph is this one:
Bilel Louatiso The best strategy that follow all sellers are to reduce prices in a specific period in order to attract more customers numbers .
One of the best marketing strategies is to reduce prices during a sale (event) in order to attract more customers.
I suspect the rest of your paragraph is off topic.

Are you trying to write an essay? If so, do you know how to structure essays and paragraphs?
First of all , thank you for your interesting reply.About paragraph's strructure , i don't know exactly what can i do , can you give more advices .
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Bilel LouatiFirst of all, thank you for your interesting reply. About paragraph structure, I don't know exactly what I can do. Can you give more advice, please?
Each body paragraph should deal with only one point/idea.
- A body paragraph starts with a topic sentence. This introduces the point you want to explain in the paragraph. It must relate to the essay topic too.
For example, "One of the best marketing strategies is to reduce prices during a sale (event) in order to attract more customers."
- Then you need to write one or two supporting sentences. These elaborate on and explain the point.
- After that, you add some example sentences. These give specific examples to prove/demonstrate the point.
I'll begin with introduction to topic :
"Marketing is related to event that's why every sellers want to attract new customers in this period . But every sellers have his own strategy ."
Bilel LouatiI'll begin with introduction to topic :
What does "introduction to topic" mean?
Bilel LouatiMarketing is related to event that's why every sellers want to attract new customers in this period .
That doesn't make sense. Are you trying to write a topic sentence?
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i used "I'll begin with introduction to topic :" to wite my pragraph , like a separator
can you give an example of introduction to this topic please ?
I gave you a good topic sentence. Why don't you start with that and write the rest of the paragraph as I've indicated? Emotion: wink
thank you i'll write a complete essay and i'il post here
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