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Hi teachers

I would appreciate very much if you could edit my paragraph:

For a virtuous person, if wanting to be perfect in virtue, he must reject troubles from surroundings; if wanting to improve morals, he is supposed to acquire industry, thrift, honesty, and righteousness; if not disregarding glory and wealth, he will never be able to identify his own life-mottoes; if not rejecting troubles from surroundings, he will never be progressive.He needs to be undisturbed in mind when studying; talents spring from studying.
If studying without aims, never are achievements obtained in studying. Being lazy cannot make mind excited, and personality cannot be trained if being impatient to see achievements.

We will get old when time goes by; will is also gradually exhausted with time, and it finally fades and falls like leaves. Most of the people who cannot take over career from their ancestors will be grieved and live a poor life at the end, and there's no chance for them to regret then.

Thank you in advance
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I have underlined some problem areas. You need to recast your sentences and eliminate the awkward or impossible '' if...-ing' phrase:

For a virtuous person, if wanting to be perfect in virtue, he must reject troubles from surroundings; if wanting to improve morals, he is supposed to acquire industry, thrift, honesty, and righteousness; if not disregarding glory and wealth, he will never be able to identify his own life-mottoes; if not rejecting troubles from surroundings, he will never be progressive.He needs to be undisturbed in mind when studying; talents spring from studying.
If studying without aims, never are achievements obtained in studying. Being lazy cannot make mind excited, and personality cannot be trained if being impatient to see achievements.

We will get old when time goes by; will is also gradually exhausted with time, and it finally fades and falls like leaves. Most of the people who cannot take over career from their ancestors will be grieved and live a poor life at the end, and there's no chance for them to regret then.
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Thank you Mister Micawber , your editing is very excellent .