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This is a presentation.
My english is not good.
I don't konw whether I have to correct some sentences in grammar.
Thank you for correcting my presentation' line.

I want to introduce myself to you. I want to share the process of my English learning Now, I am study at university. Before attending the university, I majored in department of electron at five-year technical school. Not only did most faculty not put any pressure on me on study, but also my attitude of learning was toward being fish in troubled water. In other words, I had never assimilated any knowledge form these easy classes.

I didn’t have an epiphany of importance of learning until I was twenty. I should do something for my future. Therefore, I told myself that it is about time to change the attitude toward studying hard. In the meanwhile I went to a cram school to prepare the university transfer. It was after attending the course on English that I just known two words, enjoy and information, and not to mention grammar or reading ability. Although I understood my English is too poor, I still stuck to study hard.

For example, I didn’t grasp how to read article and to analyze the grammar. In other words, I hardly knew what English was. To pass it, I tried to memorize fifty vocabularies per day in the articles I read. Unfortunately, I didn’t pass the exam. Then I got the deepest depression to enlist to protect our Formosa. However, god blesses me. I could go home because of myopia after serving as a serviceman for one month. My mother encouraged me to test the university transfer again, passing it after pouring over my books.

Attending the university is a vital turning point for my studying career. At university, I acquire more knowledge that helps not only sharpen my critical thinking but also open my eyes to new possibilities. In addition, I found English is not a subject but an interesting tool. Besides doing my normal homework, I study English day and night. This summer vacation, I joined the short-term language school in Miami instead of the opportunity of internship in media. I got there to speak English with native English speaker with a bit language barrier, I think I should continue to practice it, and a dream of studying abroad become a reality.
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kk

I didn't fully correct your version. But I got a lot of the errors. Have a look at the edited version below and see what you think.

MountainHiker



I want to introduce myself to you. I want to share the process of my English learning[.] Now, I am study[ing] at university. Before attending the university, I majored in department of electron[ics] at five-year technical school. [Not only did most faculty not put any pressure on me on study, but also my attitude of learning was toward being fish in troubled water.—sentence needs work.] In other words, I [] never assimilated any knowledge f[r]om these easy classes.

I didn’t have an epiphany of importance of learning until I was twenty. I should do something for my future. Therefore, I told myself that it is about time to change the attitude toward studying hard. In the meanwhile I went to a cram[??] school to prepare the university transfer. It was after attending the course on English that I just known two words, “enjoy” and “information”[.] grammar or reading ability. Although I understood my English is [] poor, I still stuck to study hard.

For example, I didn’t grasp how to read article and to analyze the grammar. In other words, I hardly knew what English was. To pass it, I tried to memorize fifty vocabularies per day in the articles I read. Unfortunately, I didn’t pass the exam. Then I got the deepest depression to enlist to protect our Formosa. However, god blesses me. I could go home because of myopia after serving as a serviceman for one month. My mother encouraged me to test the university transfer again, passing it after pouring over my books.

Attending the university is a vital turning point for my studying career. At university, I acquire[d] more knowledge that help[ed] not only sharpen my critical thinking but also open[ed] my eyes to new possibilities. In addition, I found English is not a subject but an interesting tool. Besides doing my normal homework, I stud[ied] English day and night. This summer vacation, I joined the short-term language school in Miami instead of the opportunity of [an] internship in media. I [went] there to speak English with native English speaker [with a bit language barrier??]. I think I should continue to practice [English] and [my]dream of studying abroad [will] become a reality.
Hello MountainHiker
Thank you for your help.
I would like to know whether my third paragraph has some space to improve or not.

This is a cleft sentence. I think i don't really know the main ponit of cleft sentence so as to produce the awkward sentence.

It was after attending the course on English that I just known two words, “enjoy” and “information
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Hi kk,
This is a cleft sentence. I think i don't really know the main ponit of cleft sentence so as to produce the awkward sentence.

It was after attending the course on English that I just known two words, “enjoy” and “information


I did not understand you. Please rephrase your request in a different manner and I will try again.

I don't know what you mean by "cleft sentence" and I don't know what you are referring to with English course and two words "enjoy" and "information".

Please try to explain in a different manner.

MountainHiker
Hello MountainHiker
cleft sentence is like It was after turning up the first landslide resulting in many people's deaths that the government began to emphasize the important of environmental protection.

I don't know how to explain this cleft sentence It was after attending the course on English that I just known two words, “enjoy” and “information.
I mean I attended the first English class in cram school and. In the meanwhile I just knew two words.

Thank you for your help.
I would like to know whether my third paragraph has some space to improve or not. Can you give some critical suggestions about this paragraph?

For example, I didn’t grasp how to read article and to analyze the grammar. In other words, I hardly knew what English was. To pass it, I tried to memorize fifty vocabularies per day in the articles I read. Unfortunately, I didn’t pass the exam. Then I got the deepest depression to enlist to protect our Formosa. However, god blesses me. I could go home because of myopia after serving as a serviceman for one month. My mother encouraged me to test the university transfer again, passing it after pouring over my books.

Thank you very much
kk,

Sorry, it's probably just me, but I am still having some difficulty understanding. I hope someone else joins in and provides some guidance.
For example, I didn’t grasp how to read article and to analyze the grammar. In other words, I hardly knew what English was. To pass it, I tried to memorize fifty vocabularies per day in the articles I read. Unfortunately, I didn’t pass the exam. Then I got the deepest depression to enlist to protect our Formosa. However, god blesses me. I could go home because of myopia after serving as a serviceman for one month. My mother encouraged me to test the university transfer again, passing it after pouring over my books.


For example, I didn’t grasp how to read article and to analyze grammar. In other words, I hardly understood English. To pass it, I tried to memorize fifty words per day from the articles I read. Unfortunately, I didn’t pass the exam. [Then I got the deepest depression to enlist to protect our Formosa--doesn't make sense to me.] After much thought and consternation, I decided to enlist in our Formosa (what's a formosa?). However, god blesses me. (??doesn't really belong) I could go home because of (my) myopia (poor vision??) after only having served as a serviceman for one month. My mother encouraged me to take the university test again. I passed it it after pouring over my books.

I am not sure I correctly fixed your paragraph. Have a look at it and let me know.

MountainHiker
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Hello MountainHike

formosa means TAIWAN . I enlist in army to protect my country
Those who are 20 have to enlist in army.
This is a obligation for man who are 20.

if you are poor vision , you don't need to enlist in army.
myopia means poor vision
This sentence is ok: I could go home because of poor vision after only having served as a serviceman for one month

Thank you

I am sorry to take much of your time.
Thank anyway.
KK
Question for KK:

Do people still call Taiwan "Formosa"? I thought it's an old term. I haven't heard of it since my last history class.

Just my 2 cents.
Hi kk,

I think we made some progress. If you want, post your revised essay, and we'll have another look.

MountainHiker
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