Topic: Around The World, Many Adults Are Working From Home, And More Children Are Beginning To Study From Home Because Technology Has Become Cheaper And More Accessible. Do You Think This Is A Positive Or Negative Development?
It has been suggested that nowadays, more and more children tend to learn knowledge at home instead of going to schools or extra classes, and so do adults, owing to the development of technology as well as its inexpensive cost and accessible functions. In my opinion, this trend would create certain positive sides but some negative effects as well.
On the one hand, it can be obviously seen that technology evolves leading to independence and increasing children's self-studying skills, which are necessary features to improve their mind-skills and also their independent perception. With the development of technological devices, children can easily study with a mass of knowledge and a world of resources updated and added daily and have to pay no fee. They may learn lots of things, not only some limited subjects at school but also life skills, languages, argumentative skills, ...etc, which they are not taught in some places like schools, extra classes. They totally can gain success with their fundamental possibilities as much as other students who enter studying levels at school. For instance, according to the New York Times, the percentage of students who are not going to school but can go into leading companies is the same as those who completed universities or high school degrees in 2017.
On the other hand, there will also be some negative points in self-studying at home for children. Opting to learn from home means students need to considerably choose the correct resources to study among a huge number of resources on the Internet. Choosing the right or wrong ways and sources to learn from may exert directly bad or good effects on your knowledge and result in the preciseness and accuracy of the information you absorb every day.
In conclusion, thanks to technological development, we have a cheaper and more accessible way to learn knowledge, but we also need to take consideration carefully.
Topic: Around The World, Many Adults Are Working From Home, And More Children Are Beginning To Study From Home Because computers have Technology Has Become Cheaper And the internet is More Accessible. Do You Think This Is A Positive Or Negative Development? (The topic is not written correctly.)
It has been is suggested that nowadays, more and more children tend to learn knowledge (That is a wrong collocation. Knowledge is what we know. One can acquire / gain knowledge or learn something such as English, math and science.) at home instead of going to schools or extra classes, and so do adults, owing to the development of technology (poor phrase. Technology has been being developed for hundreds of thousands of years.) as well as its inexpensive cost and accessible functions. (wrong phrase) In my opinion, this trend would create certain positive sides but some negative effects as well.
(You did not answer the prompt, which is "is this a positive or negative development The answer has to be one of the two: 1) It is a positive development. or 2) It is a negative development.
You have to learn how to write an opinion essay. This is NOT an advantages / disadvantages essay. It is NOT a "discuss both views" essay.
You will not get a good score if you write the wrong essay type.
On the one hand, (wrong transition phrase for this essay type) it can be obviously seen that the availability of the internet and smartphones technology evolves leading to independence and increasing children's self-studying skills, which are necessary features to improve their mind-skills (wrong phrase) and also their independent perception. (wrong word) With the development of technological devices, children can easily study with a mass of knowledge and a world of resources updated and added daily and have to pay no fee. (off-topic) They may learn lots of things, not only some limited subjects at school but also life skills, languages, argumentative skills, ...etc, (Do not use ellipses. "..." Do not use "etc." Using them together is really really bad because they mean the same thing. ) which they are not taught in some places like schools, extra classes. (ungrammatical noun phrase. Missing conjunction.) They totally can gain success with their fundamental possibilities (wrong phrase) as much as other students who enter studying levels (wrong phrase) at school. For instance, according to the New York Times, the percentage of students who are not going to school (That makes no sense. It is not what you mean..) but can go into leading companies is the same as those who completed universities or high school degrees in 2017.
On the other hand, there will also be some negative points (wrong essay type.) in self-studying at home for children. Opting to learn from home means students need to considerably (wrong word) choose the correct resources to study among a huge number of resources on the Internet. Choosing the right or wrong ways and sources to learn from may exert directly bad or good effects on your knowledge (wrong phrase) and result in the preciseness and accuracy of the information you absorb every day.
In conclusion, thanks to technological development, we have a cheaper and more accessible way to learn knowledge, but we also need to take consideration carefully.
Your conclusion does not answer the prompt.
To write this essay you need to do the following.
1. Answer the prompt in paragraph #1. For example: It is a positive development.
2. Give the first reason for your answer in paragraph #2. For example: Studying and working from home save the cost of transportation. Also it gives students and employees great flexibility in scheduling their time.
3. Give a second reason for your answer in paragraph #3. For example: Students can access a wide range of material on the internet to help them learn. They can find a video or presentation that clarifies a difficult concept.
4. In the last paragraph, restate your answer and briefly summarize the two main points.
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