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I want to send out an email. This is the template email my colleague has given me. I do not want to be exactly the same. Could anyone help me to re-phrase the email so that it won't seem that I am copying word by word?

Attached is the staff attendance listing for period 01 Sep 08 to 15 Sep 08. Please disseminate the info to your staff to confirm correctness of the data. Should there be any discrepancies, please let me know by indicating the correct timing in which the staff clock in and out.
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There are a few things that are not quite right in your colleague's format.
iconoffashionAttached is the staff attendance listing for period 01 Sep 08 to 15 Sep 08. Please disseminate the info to your staff to confirm the accuracy of the data. Should there be any discrepancies, please let me know by indicating the correct time at in which the staff clocked in and out.

This can work for your version:

Attached is the staff attendance listing for 01 throuh 15 Sep 08. Please disseminate to your staff to confirm the accuracy of the data and let me know about any errors by clearly indicating the correct clock-in/clock-out time(s).
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Please disseminate and review the staff attendance file for the time period of 01 September to 15 Septmber 2008.

If you encounter a discrepancy; kindly, report to me the date and correct in and out hours for each staff member.

Your cooperation and accuracy is appreciated.

R/

Joe
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Please check if there’s any discrepancy.