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Dear all,

Hi, my name is Hanh. I'm a Vietnamese student. I'm now preparing for my IELTS test, which will be happened on this April. The point thing is that my writing skill is too bad, I do not know if I could reach my 6.5 aim so I really hope if you could spend some of your precious time checking my task 2?

If you are free to go, this is the essay that I've written 30 minutes ago:

TOPICS: Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Computers are now becoming more and more famous in our modern world. In every home, we can easily expect to see many forms of computers. Therefore, many people said that computers were the most essential machine of the new century. I completely agree with this statement because computers are really helpful for human life.
The first important thing about a computer is that it helps students doing homework. With the development of both computer and Internet, it is getting easier for school boys and girls doing research. They can find out many useful things for the essay with different topics. Especially, sources could be written in many languages for every nationality.
Another advantage of using computer is that we can use this as an invention to connect with other people. By using social networks such as Facebook, Twitter, Skype in this high technology, children and adults from every countries could chat to each other immediately. Furthermore, this action is free. As an everyday user, I have got an amazing experience with this function. It was 2 months ago, I have a military course which asked me to live far for my parents. At first, I missed my family so much, I even cry for not seeing them. But it was a computer and its apps that cheered me up, I could talk and see my lovely home everyday at anytime.
In conclusion, computers are such a vital invention for human being's life. In fact, they are indispensable machine that I think we must all have one.

That's all of my essay. And I'm looking forward to picking up your brain.

Thanks!!!

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Your essay is just barely over the minimum word count. To avoid a possible downgrade of your score, make sure you are well over the 250-word minimum.



Computers are now becoming more and more famous (That is not a good word choice. Famous usually applies to individual people. ) in our modern world. In every home, we can easily expect to see many forms of computers. Therefore, many people said that computers were the most essential machine (Not a good word choice. Many inventions, such as nuclear power, are not machines.) of the new century (The new century is 2000-2100. That is not the topic.) . I completely agree with this statement because computers are really helpful for human life.
The first important thing about a computer is that it helps students doing (do) homework. With the development of both computer and Internet, it is getting easier for school boys and girls doing (wrong form) research. They can find out many useful things for the essay (Which essay?) with different topics. Especially, sources could be written in many languages for every nationality.
Another advantage of using (missing article) computer is that we can use it this as an invention to connect with other people. By using social networks such as Facebook, Twitter, (missing word) Skype in this high technology, children and adults from every contries could can chat to each other immediately. Furthermore, this action is free. As an everyday user, I have got an amazing experience with this function. It was 2 months ago, (comma splice error) I have (wrong tense) a military course which asked me to live far for my parents. At first, I missed my family so much, I even cry for because of not seeing them. But it was a computer and its apps that cheered me up, (comma splice error) I could talk and see my lovely home everyday at any time.
In conclusion, computers are such a vital invention for human being's life. In fact, they are such an the indispensable machine that I think we must all have one.

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Hi you, my name is Hanh. I'm a Vietnamese student and I'm preparing for my IELTS test, which happens in April. If you suddenly bump into my topics, could you spend some of your precious time reading my task 2? I really need you since my writing skill is too bad and I have my aim is 6.5.

If you are free to go, this is the essay I just have written 30 minutes ago:

TOPICS: Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

And here is my essay:

Computers are now becoming more and more famous in our modern world. In every home, we can easily expect to see many forms of computers. Therefore, many people said that computers were the most essential machine of the new century. I completely agree with this statement because computers are really helpful for human life.
The first important thing about a computer is that it helps students doing homework. With the development of both computer and Internet, it is getting easier for school boys and girls doing research. They can find out many useful things for the essay with different topics. Especially, sources could be written in many languages for every nationality.
Another advantage of using computer is that we can use this as an invention to connect with other people. By using social networks such as Facebook, Twitter, Skype in this high technology, children and adults from every contries could chat to each other immediately. Furthermore, this action is free. As an everyday user, I have got an amazing experience with this function. It was 2 months ago, I have a military course which asked me to live far for my parents. At first, I missed my family so much, I even cry for not seeing them. But it was a computer and its apps that cheered me up, I could talk and see my lovely home everyday at any time.
In conclusion, computers are such a vital invention for human being's life. In fact, they are the indispensable machine that I think we must all have one.

I'm looking forward to picking up your mind.

Thank you so much.

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