Small businesses should avoid recruiting young women who do not have their own families in order to avoid paying for maternity leave later on.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people advise that small companies should not hire young, child-free women so as not to pay for their maternity leave in the future. From my point of view, I completely disagree with this statement.


First, hiring young women can be a smart financial strategy for small companies which usually have a limited budget. First, hiring young women can be a smart financial strategy for small companies which usually have a limited budget. They are also less likely to initiate salary negotiations or to overreact when a request for a salary increase is rejected compared to men. On top of that, young women nowadays tend to live alone and focus on their careers. They are ambitious about progressing in their profession, so they work hard and can greatly benefit their companies. Besides, diversity of opinions is important in businesses as it can lead to creativity and innovation, therefore, lacking a unique and different perspective of young women can be a great loss.


Second, young women tend to stay with a company for a long time. They are less likely to switch companies in a short period of time. Furthermore, the cost of living is ever-increasing nowadays, so it is usually necessary for both parents to work in order to support their children. Consequently, young mothers will work hard to avoid getting fired and having to find another job. Moreover, through receiving support during pregnancy and after birth, young mothers are likely to develop gratitude and attachment towards their companies, and therefore become more industrious and diligent with their work. Commercial organizations can obtain loyal employees by hiring young female staff, which is especially important for small businesses as they need to have a stable workforce.


In conclusion, young women can be a cheap, effective workforce who will show their loyalty after receiving maternity subsidies. Thus, small companies should not reject young female candidates because of paid maternity leave and should think of it as an investment in the long run.

phamnuongSmall businesses should avoid recruiting young newly-married women who do not have their own families in order to avoid paying for maternity leave later on.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The task was not very well-written.

Some people advise that small companies should not hire young, childless child-free women so as not to pay for their maternity leave in the future. From my point of view, ("Disagree" is a point of view. So the phrase is unnecessary and redundant.) I completely disagree with this advice. statement. (You are not disagreeing that people give advice to small businesses, are you?)


First, hiring young women can be a smart financial strategy for small companies which usually have a limited budget. (You repeated the same sentence.) First, hiring young women can be a smart financial strategy for small companies which usually have a limited budget. Compared to men, they (Put this phrase first. a) It is a good transition. b) It further identifies "they" as being women, not the companies.) are also (wrong usage.) less likely to initiate salary negotiations or to overreact when their request for a salary increase is rejected compared to men. On top of that, young women nowadays tend to live alone and focus on their careers. They are ambitious about progressing in their profession, so they work hard and can greatly benefit their companies. Besides, a diversity of opinions is important in businesses as it can lead to creativity and innovation, (comma splice error) therefore, lacking a the unique and different perspectives of young women can be a great loss.


Second, young women tend to stay with a company for a long time. They are less likely to switch companies after in a short period of time. Furthermore, the cost of living is ever-increasing nowadays, so it is usually necessary for both parents to work in order to support their children. Consequently, young mothers (off-topic. It is about young women with no children, remember? If you go off-topic, you will lose points. You need a sentence to introduce your idea.) will work hard to avoid getting fired and having to find another job. Moreover, through receiving support during pregnancy and after birth, young mothers are likely to develop gratitude and attachment towards their companies, and therefore become more industrious and diligent with their work. Commercial organizations can obtain loyal employees by hiring young female staff members, which is especially important for small businesses as they need to have a stable workforce.

In conclusion, young women can be part of a cheap, (That is offensive.) cost-effective, productive workforce who will show their loyalty after receiving returning from maternity leave subsidies. Thus, small companies should not reject young female candidates because of the prospect of paid maternity leave and should think of it as an investment in the long run.

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First, hiring young women can be a an effective and smart financial strategy for small companies which usually have a limited budget. This is because young women can accept a job with a low salary as they tend not to have work experience or necessary skills. Also, compared to men, they...


Furthermore, the cost of living is ever-increasing nowadays, so it is usually necessary for both parents to work in order to support their children. Consequently, even if a young female worker gets pregnant, they are not likely to quit their job after birth, but rather working hard to avoid getting fired and having to find another job. Moreover, through receiving support during pregnancy and after birth, they are likely to develop gratitude and attachment towards their companies, and therefore become more industrious and diligent with their work.

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First, hiring young women can be a an effective and smart financial strategy for small companies which usually have a limited budget. This is because young women will / are willing to can accept a job with a low salary as they tend not to have work experience or necessary skills. Also, compared to men, they...

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Furthermore, the cost of living is ever-increasing nowadays, so it is usually necessary for both parents to work in order to support their children. Consequently, even if a young female worker an employee gets pregnant, they are not likely to quit their job after birth, but rather work working hard to avoid getting fired and having to find another job. Moreover, through receiving generous maternity leave support during pregnancy and after birth, (That is ok, but the more high-level vocabulary is "maternity leave." There is maternal leave with pay and unpaid maternity leave, where the employer holds the job open for you, but does not pay any salary during the time off.) they are likely to develop gratitude and attachment towards their companies, and therefore become more industrious and diligent with their work.


Note that some progressive countries have not only paid maternity leave, but paid paternity leave as well. The father can take leave to take care of his wife and their new baby.

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Second, women tend to stay with a company longer than their male counterparts. They are less likely to job hop from one company to another for a small increase in salary. Furthermore, even if they do get pregnant and the company pays their maternity leave, it will be of benefit to the company in the long term. The reason for this is higher company loyalty. By receiving support during pregnancy and after birth, new mothers will have gratitude and attachment towards their employer. They will return to their old jobs with more enthusiasm and dedication. Not only that, their attitude will be shared with all their colleagues, and thus the company is rewarded with a loyal, committed workforce. The company will feel like one big, happy family with members that that support each other, and this can only be positive for business success.

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