Being able to speak a foreign language is an advantage these days. Some people think that children should start learning a foreign language at primary school, while others think children should begin in secondary school.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In today's interconnected and interdependent world, the benefits of being bilingual are enormous. People have differing views about whether children’s acquisition of a foreign language should start at primary or secondary level. In my opinion, it is best to begin as early as possible.
There are two main reasons why some people argue that foreign language learning should be introduced in secondary school. First, they believe that only after children reach puberty are they capable of learning a second language efficiently. The reason is that at this point, these children’s cognitive capacity has developed to a certain extent that can facilitate efficient second language acquisition, and they have also established several strategies, skills, and qualities that are necessary or beneficial for such acquisition, such as note-taking, critical thinking, and self-discipline. Second, it is argued that dual language learning at a young age can cause children to mix up the uses of the two as they are still in the early stage of establishing their first language. This can lead to delayed language development, which is totally counterproductive. Hence, foreign languages should be taught at secondary school as students have already gotten a solid foundation in their mother tongue.
However, I agree with the belief that second language acquisition should begin at primary level. If elementary schools add a foreign language as one of their compulsory subjects, their students will spend less than 2 hours per week in such classes. This limited exposure is not likely to interfere with the acquisition of their mother tongue, which happens for virtually the rest of the day. Thus, the argument that early dual language learning will cause speech delays seems invalid. one’s mother tongue usually contains certain grammar and pronunciation rules that are diametrically different to those of the language they want to learn, for example, the order of objects and verbs in a sentence between Korean and English, and the ways to pronounce the final consonant sounds in English versus Vietnamese. This makes it hard for teenagers and adults who are so used to the structures of their first language to become fluent in the second one. To minimize this problem, foreign language learning should be taught at the elementary level when children are still in the early stage of language development. This also gives children several more years to gradually accumulate and assimilate new words, grammar and pronunciation rules, and sometimes a different writing system. Hence, the earlier children are exposed to a second language, the higher the chance of proficiency in that language.
In conclusion, the possibility of language delays related to early dual language learning and the advantage of well-developed cognitive capacity and learning strategies, skills, and qualities in secondary students cause some people to support second language introduction at the post-primary level. However, the low probability of such delays, as the exposure to a second language in school is rather limited, and the benefits of less interference from the mother tongue and several more years for gradual learning make dual language acquisition at an early age more attractive.
You wrote over 500 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high band scores. And there are many reasons for this.
First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.
Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task response or coherence and cohesion.
Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. Do not write about things that are not specifically given in the task. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even lose your direction and contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples and personal experiences. It is much better to have two well-developed and fleshed-out argument points than to have four which are just individual separate statements.
Fourth, you will spend a lot of time writing, and not have sufficient time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, which everyone makes, and that lowers your score.
Fifth, pity the examiners who have to read all the IELTS essays individually. There are hundreds of them. If they read your long essay when they are tired at the end of the day, they will score extra hard and not be very generous when scoring.
Sixth, you will not have enough time for Task 1, and get a lower score there. You should allow 40 minutes for task and 20 minutes for Task 1. The word counts are designed so that you have ample time for brainstorming and then writing the two parts.
Aim to write 270-300 words for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.
You can use this word counter: https://www.ieltsscore.com/word-counter/
Your writing is quite verbose and wordy. You can express the same ideas in fewer words.
In today's interconnected and interdependent world, the benefits of being bilingual are enormous. People have differing views about whether children’s acquisition of a foreign language should start learning a foreign language in primary or secondary school. In my opinion, it is best to begin as early as possible.
There are two main reasons why some people argue that foreign language learning should be introduced in secondary school. First, they believe that only after children reach puberty are they capable of learning a second language efficiently. The reason is that at this point, these children’s cognitive capacity has developed to a certain extent that can facilitate for efficient second language acquisition. , and Moreover, they have also established several learning and studying strategies, skills, and qualities that are necessary or beneficial for such acquisition, such as note-taking, critical thinking, and self-discipline. Second, it is argued that dual language learning at a young age can cause children to be confused mix up the uses of the two as they are still in the early stage of establishing their first language. This can lead to delayed language development, which is totally counterproductive. Hence, foreign languages should be taught at secondary school as students have already gotten a solid foundation in their mother tongue.
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(The conclusion is quite awkward and verbose. You can cut out about half of it.)
In conclusion, the possibility of language delays related to early dual language learning and the advantage of well-developed cognitive capacity and learning strategies, skills, and qualities in secondary students cause some people to support second language introduction at the post-primary level. However, the low probability of such delays, as the exposure to a second language in school is rather limited, and the benefits of less interference from the mother tongue and several more years for gradual learning make dual language acquisition at an early age more attractive.
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