This is my thesis, and I need someone to proofread, because my social teacher is the worst teacher.

Isaac Newton was one foremost mathematician and physicist alive, as the utmost significant contributor to the advancement of modern science, and with many calculations, Isaac Newton’s changed how the way people understood the universe, because no one had been able to explain the universe before, instead, they would use religion to explain everything. Isaac Newton actually contribution to the French Revolution was not anything, for his physical mind had been long defunct, but his work and thought processes were inspirations to the following eras.

How is this for a thesis? Is it a good thesis? How do I make it better?
Thanks =)
Hi Chreal,

I am not sure what your thesis is, other than a focus on Isaac Newton.

I think you need to break up your sentences into smaller, bite sized pieces and go from there.
Isaac Newton was one foremost mathematician and physicist alive, as the utmost significant contributor to the advancement of modern science, and with many calculations, Isaac Newton’s changed how the way people understood the universe, because no one had been able to explain the universe before, instead, they would use religion to explain everything.


That's quite a mouthful, no?

By the way, they still can't explain the universe, so Newton didn't solve the problem. He shed some light, to be sure, but scientists are still bashing their brains out trying to better understand our universe.

MountainHiker
Oops, its about Newton's contribution to french revolution
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You certainly wouldn't get that from your first few opening sentences.