The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2005 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons.
The two maps illustrate how the ground floor of an art display has been altered from 2015 to the present day. Overall, several amenities and services have been added to improve mobility and visitors’ experience.
Starting with 2005, much of the area was for art exhibitions, with three on the right-hand side and one on the left upon entering the gallery, and adjacent to the fourth room was a gallery office. In terms of open space, there was a café in the top-left corner, which was easily accessed by the nearby stairs. There was a receptionist situated at the center.
Turning to the present day, the art gallery is more widely accessible with a new ramp for wheelchair users, and exhibition room four’s space has been reduced to a smaller temporary exhibition to provide space for a children’s area. Regarding refreshments service, a new vending machine has been equipped next to the temporary exhibition, as the café is now replaced by a gallery office. In addition, a lift has been installed for greater mobility. Although the gallery has transformed significantly, the three exhibition rooms remained to the right.
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TanHongThe two maps illustrate how (1) the ground floor of an art display (2) has been altered from 2015 to the present day. Overall, several (4) amenities (5) and services have been added to improve mobility and visitors’ experience.
1. "How" implies methods and steps. e.g. They employed a designer, they used a paintbrush and paint. See the "how" diagram below.
2. Art display is wrong.
3. "Altered" is not good. Alter is mainly used for clothing. Modify / change / redesign
4. When you change the topic of a paragraph, you have to start a new paragraph.
Paragraph 1: describe the figure (maps)
Paragraph 2: Report the main features.
Paragraph 3: Report some details and focus on comparisons.
5. Amenities are usually extra features provided in luxury hotels. It probably does not work well here.
6. Do not make any conclusions, reasons or deductions. Just report what you see in the figure.
Thank you for posting the very clear diagram.
The two maps, one for 2005, and one for now, illustrate how (There are no steps or methods shown.) the modifications made to the ground floor of an art gallery.
(An art gallery is a building. Usually there is a business to display and sell art.)
display has been altered from 2015 to the present day. (Make sure you copy the years correctly. WHen you begin reporting the main features, start a new paragraph.)
Overall, several amenities and services have been added (both amenities and services are not appropriate words)
to improve mobility and visitors’ experience.
(Do not make assumptions, conclusions or reasons. Just tell the reader what you see. If you look at the "big picture, what do you see?)
Overall, the building is the same size, and the entrance hall and three of exhibition rooms were not changed. A lift and wheelchair ramp have been added, but the cafe and gallery office are gone.
Starting with 2005, In 2005, much of the area was for art exhibitions with three on the right-hand side and one on the left upon entering the gallery, and adjacent to the fourth room was a gallery office. (That is very confusing and not very logical) In terms of open space, there was a café in the top-left corner, which was easily accessed by the nearby stairs. (incorrect reporting . The cafe is not on the upper floor. Everything is on the ground level.) There was a receptionist situated at the center.
Turning to the present day, Now the art gallery is more widely accessible with a new has a wheelchair ramp leading to the main entrance for wheelchair users, and exhibition room four’s (That is not good because you did not mention which room this is in the previous paragraph. You wrote that room four is an office.) space has been reduced to a smaller temporary exhibition area to provide space for a children’s area. Regarding refreshments service, A new vending machine has been equipped placed next to the temporary exhibition, as the café is now replaced by a gallery office. (incorrect reporting. There is no gallery office in the current layout.) In addition, a lift has been installed for greater mobility. (Do not write deductions, conclusions or reason.) Although the gallery has transformed significantly, the three exhibition rooms remained to the right.
Sample essay:
The two maps, one for 2005, and one for now, depict the modifications made to the ground floor of an art gallery.
Overall, the building is the same size, and the central entrance hall and three of exhibition rooms had no changes. A lift and wheelchair ramp have been added, but the cafe and gallery office are gone.
In 2005, one entered the building through the main doorway to a large entry hall with a reception desk. On the right, along the length of the building were three exhibition rooms. On the left was the fourth exhibition room and the gallery office. Behind the receptionist were a stairway and a cafe.
In the present, significant changes were on the left side of the entrance hall. The fourth exhibition room is now divided into a children's area and a temporary exhibition space. In place of the cafe and gallery office, there is a shop and small area for vending machines. A lift was installed by the stairway.
Hi, thanks a lot for your feedback.
There are some questions I want to ask: How to make the key changes clear in my body paragraphs?
The reason why I add "In terms of ..." and "greater mobility" is that I want to help the reader follow my ideas. Is this approach to writing this type of Task 1 wrong?
Thanks a lot for your time and effort!
AlpheccaStarsAmenities
Can I use "facilities" instead? Or is there any umbrella term that can represent the changes (room, ramp, cafe, machine)?
AlpheccaStars5. Amenities are usually extra features provided in luxury hotels. It probably does not work well here.
It "amenities" seems okay to me.
TanHong Is this approach to writing this type of Task 1 wrong?
Task 1 is a report (summary) intended for a maths / science / engineering lecturer in a university. In a summary report, avoid extra phrases that do not add to the material content. Make every word count.
The purpose of Task 1 is to show that you can produce a writing style appropriate for a scientific report. You can see the "big picture" without being bogged down in minute details. You are able to report the information without making deductions or conclusions or interpretations of what happened and why.