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The line graph compares the amount of fish and some different kinds of meat have been consumed in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

It is obvious that fish provided the lowest consumption each year. Over the first 10 years, beef is dominated in consumption but chicken provided the highest over the period of 15 years later.

Between 1979 and 2004, chicken consumption went up dramatically from around 140 grams per person per week to 250 grams per person per week. By contrast, lamp eaten declined to approximately 60 grams per person per week. During the same period, the fish consumption had no change over the period shown, but the figure for the beef consumption fluctuated sharply over 25 years.

By 1979, beef is the primary consumable source which provided around 220 grams per person per week. The chicken consumption is lower than the figure for the lamp consumed, but it rapidly overtook the lamp just one year later. The fish was by far the least popular consumption, with figures 60 grams per person per week.

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The line graph compares the amount of fish and some different kinds of meat have been consumed in a European country from 1979 to 2004.


Your first sentence is not grammatical. This is a complete sentence:

The line graph compares the amount of fish and some different kinds of meat.

But next you put a verb phrase (have been consumed) . But this verb does not have a subject. The sentence does not have a proper clause structure.

have been consumed in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

Also, you did not tell the reader the names of the meats, so the description is not complete.


Here are some options for the first paragraph. There are many different ways to paraphrase the description in the instructions.

1. The line graph compares the amounts of fish, chicken, beef and lamb that residents of a country in Europe ate from 1979 to 2004. The units of measure are grams per person per week.

2. The line graph gives the quantities of fish, chicken, beef and lamb that were eaten weekly by people in a European country from 1979 to 2004. The units of measure are grams per person per week.

3. The line graph plots the number of grams per person of fish, plus three types of meat (chicken, beef and lamb) eaten weekly by people living in a European country from 1979 to 2004.



It is obvious that fish provided (wrong expression. The fish did not provide anything. ) the lowest consumption each year. Over the first 10 years, beef is dominated (unnatural English) in consumption but chicken provided the highest over the period of 15 years later.

Between 1979 and 2004, chicken consumption went up dramatically from around 140 grams per person per week to 250 grams per person per week. By contrast, lamp (wrong word - see image.) eaten declined to approximately 60 grams per person per week. During the same period, the fish consumption had no change over the period shown, but the figure (wrong word) for the beef consumption fluctuated (Not a good word choice) sharply over 25 years.

By 1979, beef is the primary consumable source which provided around 220 grams per person per week. The chicken consumption is lower than the figure (wrong word) for the lamp consumed, but it rapidly overtook the lamp just one year later. The fish was by far the least popular consumption, with figures 60 grams per person per week.


Lamps

Lambs


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* can you recommend one word to replace the word “dominate” since I cannot find any other words!


The line graph compares the amount of fish, chicken, beef and lamb were eaten in a European country from 1979 to 2004. The units of measure are grams per person per week.

Generally, the quantity of fish eaten per week is lowest each year. Over the first 10 years, beef is dominated in consumption, but chicken is consumed most over the period of 15 years later.

Between 1979 and 2004, chicken consumption went up dramatically from around 140 grams per person per week to 250 grams per person per week. By contrast, the amount of lamb eaten weekly declined to approximately 60 grams per person. During the same period, the fish consumption had no change over the period shown, whereas the beef consumption varied sharply over 25 years.

By 1979, beef is the primary meat which was consumed around 220 grams per person per week. The chicken consumption is lower than the lamb consumption, but it rapidly overtook the lamp just one year later. The fish eaten was shown lowest in the graph with 60 grams per person per week.

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hang9815The line graph compares the amount of fish, chicken, beef and lamb were eaten in a European country from 1979 to 2004. The units of measure are grams per person per week.

Your sentence is still ungrammatical. You do not know how to write relative clauses.

Here is a lesson on relative clauses.


Here are your two sentences:

1. The line graph compares the amount of fish, chicken, beef and lamb.

2. They were eaten in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

Combine sentences #1 and #2 into one sentence using a relative clause.

The line graph compares the amount of fish, chicken, beef and lamb that were eaten in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

hang9815The line graph compares the amount of fish, chicken, beef and lamb that were eaten in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

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Generally, the quantity of fish eaten per week is the lowest each year. Over the first 10 years, more beef is consumed than any of the others, dominated in consumption, but chicken surpasses beef around 1987 and has the highest consumption to the end of the period. is consumed most over the period of 15 years later.

Between 1979 and 2004, chicken consumption went up dramatically from around 140 grams per person per week to 250 grams per person per week. In contrast, the amount of lamb eaten weekly declined to approximately 60 grams per person. During the same period, the Fish consumption had no change over the period shown, whereas the beef consumption varied sharply. over 25 years.

By 1979, beef is the primary meat which was consumed that people ate, around 220 grams per person per week. The chicken consumption is lower than the lamb consumption, but it rapidly overtook the lamp in 1980. just one year later. The amount of fish eaten was shown lowest in the graph with 60 grams per person per week.


Example overall / detail paragraphs:

Overall, people ate more of these foods in 2004 than they did in 1979; a total of about 570 grams per week in 2004 compared to 460 in 1979. The increase was mainly due to chicken, since it was the only one that went up, whereas beef and lamb declined markedly, and fish very slightly. Of all these protein sources, fish was eaten the least.

In detail, beef was the most popular in the initial ten years, 1979-1989, ranging between180 and 240, but was overtaken by chicken around 1989, with an amount of 180-200. After that, chicken became the most popular of the four; at the end of the period, people ate more than twice as much chicken as beef, which was in second place. Lamb was the least favorite of the three meats over the entire period except for the first year, when it was slightly favored over chicken (150 versus 140). Finally, fish consumption did not go outside the range of 45-60 grams per week per person throughout the twenty-five years.

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