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It is important for children to learn the different between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children.

Teaching children to tell right from wrong when they were you is extremely essential. There are some opinions that punishment is one of the most effective ways to use to teach children to learn this distinction. I totally approve of this view. If you want your children to learn something effectively, you will probably need the right method. Not all sort of punishment is good, so you need to make the right choices.

There is evidence that punishment make the children learn quickly. Another benefit is that they will remember longer what they have been taught by this method. As a result of the sense of fear, children are unlikely to repeat those actions which they have been punished for in the past. For instance, when i was a little girl, i ate the cake in the fridge, then my mother did not let me have any other cakes for a week. After 3 days, I regreted having eaten that cake. I thought if i had not eaten that cake, i would have had more snacks . From then on, that feeling reminds me and even stops me when i want to do that action again. In addition to some sound advice, it is sometime need punishment to teach a child effectively.

Although punishment has some advantages, it does have some drawbacks. It may hurt the children or make them feel scare, physically and mentally hurt. So you have to sort out the good ones. Choose some good punishment such as forcing the child to stand by the wall if they are so noisy. Another good recommend for less patient child is make them draw pictures. The appropriate punishment will help your child improve not only physical but also social skill.

In conclusion, punishment is an effective way to teach children but before that remember to choose the appropriate one to make your children become better.

Can u check my fault and give a band score for me. Thank you!!!

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It is important for children to learn the different between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?


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Teaching children to tell right from wrong when they were you is extremely essential. There are some who hold the opinion (This is one view, or opinion.) that punishment is one of the most effective ways to use to teach children to learn this distinction. I totally approve of this view. If you want your children to learn something effectively, you will probably need the right method. Not all sort (wrong form) of punishment is good, so you need to make the right choices.

There is evidence that punishment make the children learn quickly. Another benefit is that they will remember longer what they have been taught by this method. As a result of the sense of fear, children are unlikely to repeat those actions which they have been punished for in the past. For instance, when i was a little girl, i ate the cake in the fridge, (comma splice error)then my mother did not let me have any other cakes for a week. After 3 days, I regreted having eaten that cake. I thought if i had not eaten that cake, i would have had more snacks . From then on, that feeling reminds me and even stops me when i want to do that action again. In addition to some sound advice, it is sometime need punishment to teach a child effectively.

Although punishment has some advantages, it does have some drawbacks. It may hurt the children or make them feel scare, (missing word) physically and mentally hurt. So you have to sort out the good ones. Choose some good punishment such as forcing the child to stand by the wall if they are too so noisy. Another good recommend for the less impatient child is make them draw pictures. The appropriate punishment will help your child improve not only physical but also social skill.

In conclusion, punishment is an effective way to teach children but before administering any punishment, that remember to choose the appropriate one to make your children behave become better.

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hi, thanks for your help. But can you give me a band score in ielts for this writing, I have not taken an ielts before. I am a little confuse!!!

Trúc Phạm Trương ThanhI am a little confused!!!

I am not a professional examiner, and I have not been trained in scoring essays. I am reluctant to give band scores because of this. It may mislead you.

There are four criteria that make up your score. They have equal weight.

1. Task Response (your answer, position, ideas, relevancy and ability to develop ideas).

This score will be lower if

a.) your answer is too short,
b.) you stray off-topic, or
c.) you have a lot of repetition or
d.) you do not have a good a thesis statement or a good conclusions.

The score will be higher if

a.) you give good and relevant examples to back up your position and
b.) you answer the topic question directly and completely.

2. Coherence & Cohesion (organisation, paragraphing, transitions between and within paragraphs.)

The score will be lower if

a.) You do not write in paragraphs.
b.) There is no logical flow of ideas.
c.) The paragraphs contain several different points.

3. Grammar (How well you can write simple, compound and complex sentences).

The score will be lower if

a.) You make many grammatical errors such as subject/verb agreement, use of singular versus plural nouns, inappropriate use of adverbs.
b.) You do not use punctuation and capitalization correctly.
c.) You have comma splice errors, missing conjunctions, or other types of structural errors.

4. Lexical Resource (the range of your vocabulary and your choice of appropriate words.)

Your score will be lower if
a.) The reader does not understand your writing.
b.) The words or phrases are unnatural or awkward
c.) You use inappropriate English (texting shortcuts, slang language, archaic language, dialects)
d.) You have spelling mistakes.

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