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The given bar chart indicates the variations among the budgets on four sections namely Machinery, Building, Staff training and Research on five separated organizations.

Overall, whereas four associations A, B, D, E allocated a majority of their spending on Building and Staff training, these two categories were given the least investment from association C. Likewise, organization B had the largest sum of money to be invested.

As can be seen from the chart, Staff training expenditure of organization was 1.9 billion euros, twice as much as that of organization E. In contrast, this category received the second highest spending of organization A, at 1.2 billion, compared to only 0.8 billion and 0.7 billion in organization C and D respectively. Budgets on Building in organization C, D, E were the same (1 billion).

Furthermore, whilst 1.6 billion of organization B was allocated on Research, consortium D invested the lowest amount of money on this section, at 0.6 billion, followed by 0.7 billion, 1,1 billion of consortium E and A respectively. In terms of Machinery, investment from organization C was the highest with the same figures for its research budget, at 1.3 billion, while that of organization E stood at 0.8 billion.

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The given (Do not use "provided", "given" or any other past participle. It is not natural English) or bar chart compares indicates the variations among the budgets (wrong word. A budget would be planned allocation in a particular time period. There is no time period specified in the instructions.) on four sections (wrong word. ) namely Machinery, Building, Staff training and Research on five separated organizations.


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The bar chart compares the internal business investments in billions of Euros in four different areas by five different organizations. The areas of investment are Machinery, Buildings, Staff training and Research. The organizations are labeled with letters A through E.

Once you tell the reader that A, B, C, D and E are the "names" of these entities, you do not need to keep repeating the word "organization". Just use the letters.



Overall, whereas four associations (wrong word. ) organizations, A, B, D, and E allocated invested a majority of their funds spending (wrong word. ) on Building and Staff training, these two categories were given the least investment from association (wrong word. ) C. Likewise, organization B had the largest amount sum of money to be invested in total.

As can be seen from the chart, (Read my advice) Staff training expenditure of organization B was 1.9 billion euros, twice as much as that of organization E. In contrast, this category received the second highest investment spending of organization A, at 1.2 billion, compared to only 0.8 billion and 0.7 billion in organizations C and D respectively. Budgets (wrong word. ) on Building in organizations C, D, and E were the same (1 billion).

Furthermore, whilst 1.6 billion of organization B was given to allocated on Research, consortium (wrong word. ) D invested the lowest amount of money on this section, at 0.6 billion, followed by 0.7 billion, 1,1 billion of consortium (wrong word. ) E and A respectively. In terms of Machinery, investment from organization C was the highest with the same (wrong word. ) as figures for its research budget, at 1.3 billion, while that of organization E stood at 0.8 billion.

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The bar chart below shows the amount of money invested in each category from five organisations.

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OMG! You are so kind to me! Thanks for correcting my mistakes!!!!!! I hope that you can correct and advise me to improve my writing in both task 1 and task 2 <33333 Thanks !!!!!!

I don't know why" spending" is a wrong word

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