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Hi everyone, could you please help improve my email writing? Does it sound natural and sincere?
Thank you so much!


Email subject: Enquiry Regarding Course Re-enrollment

Dear Support Team,

I am writing to ask if you could please help me understand whether I will be able to re-enrol in the course xxxx.

My name is xxx. I am currently doing MSc. Informatics in the School of Computing Science. I took xxxx(course name) last semester, but I missed the final exam due to my health condition.

The School granted me a 9-month interruption of study, from 01/01/19 to 30/09/19. I will return to study this October and re-enrol in three other courses so that I could take all the exams and get a final score for each course. I understand that there is already a mark indicating my overall performance on the course xxxx. However, I was wondering if it is possible for me to also en-enrol on xxxx this semester and be examined at subsequent exam diet? I believe my previous coursework has shown my ability to achieve a much higher score than my current failing mark. I would truly appreciate it if you could give me this chance.

Thanks in advance,
XX
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Email subject: Enquiry Regarding Course Re-enrollment

Dear Barbara Smith (try to find out the person's name),

I am writing to enquire if I will be permitted to re-enroll in Physics 469 the course xxxx.

My name is xxx. (Your name is at the bottom of the letter.) I am currently doing enrolled at MSc. Informatics in the School of Computing Science. I took xxxx(course name) last semester, but I missed the final exam due to because of my health condition.

The Sschool (or I was) granted me (delete me, if using "I was granted") a 9nine-month (for numbers less than 10, write them out) interruption of study, break from 01/01/19 to 30/09/19. I will return to study this October and re-enroll in three other courses so that I could take all the exams and get a final score can earn a final grade for each course. I understand that Although there is already a mark/grade indicating my overall performance on the course xxxx. However, I was wondering would like to know if it is possible for me to also re-enroll for on xxxx this semester to achieve a better grade. and be examined at subsequent exam diet? (The word "diet" confuses me. You must mean something else.) I believe my My previous coursework has shown my ability to achieve a much higher score (grade?) than my current failing mark.

I would be most appreciative truly appreciate it if you would allow me the opportunity to demonstrate my enthusiasm and capabilities. could give me this chance.

(Assuming you know the person's name, then you could write something like the following sentence.)

I will contact you, Ms. Smith, within two weeks to discuss my request to re-enroll in Physics 469. (The onus is on you to contact her. Perhaps you can contact her receptionist and make an appointment.)

Thanks in advance,

Yours truly,

You


(I spelled "enroll" differently than you did. Both are acceptable. I chose a different spelling because of your subject line has "enrollment". Again, it doesn't matter.)

I hope my changes show you how to improve your letter. Once you make the changes, there are likely other areas for improvement, too. But this is a good start.

Good luck.

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Thank you so much for your careful editing and helpful advice. I truly appreciate it.

My pleasure. I am glad that you found my comments helpful and that you thanked me. When we work on an essay or letter, it is usually a reasonable amount of work. So, we always appreciate when others thank us.

Good luck.