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Please help me improve the following email. Many thanks.

Thank you for your kindness and patience extended in looking after my career planning and personal welfare due to my prolonged physical as well as mental disease in the past. I would like to share my present situation in terms of lung cancer and depressive disorder to you.

First of all, it is quite disappointing that I seemingly cannot escape from the cruse of cancer completely, even though the 5-year observation period has just gone. As recently stated by my principal doctor, my lymphorma has been found to have suspected abnormalities and hence, unlike other patient who suffer from the same mercy who can be released from intensive medical appointment after 5 years, I have to see the doctor 6 months later to keep a close monitoring on above abnormal findings. In other words, my health condition is still vulnerable at this moment.

Likewise, as recently diagnosed by my psychiatrist that my depressive disorder is still yet to be recovered and he has reiterated to recommend the Company to allow me to stay in the current post for relieving me from stress and exempting from challenges.

I fully trust that this Company is all along a caring family to deploy an extensively reasonable accommodation to staff who are unfortunately in disadvantage. Now, I pledge to stay in my current post and be exempted from transfer of work on medical ground. I hope you and fellow managers would kindly consider my request for a certain period to facilitate my recovering of acute illness. Certainly, as a loyal staff, I will accept and welcome any proper arrangements instructed by the seniors which are of the highest interests to the Company and my health conditions.

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Thank you for your kindness and patience extended in looking after my career planning and personal welfare due to my prolonged physical as well as mental disease in the past. I would like to share my present situation in terms of lung cancer and depressive disorder to you.

First of all, it is quite disappointing that I seemingly cannot escape from the cruse of cancer completely, even though the 5-year observation period has just gone. As recently stated by my principal doctor, my lymphorma has been found to have suspected abnormalities and hence, unlike other patient who suffer from the same mercy who can be released from intensive medical appointment after 5 years, I have to see the doctor 6 months later to keep a close monitoring on above abnormal findings. In other words, my health condition is still vulnerable at this moment.

Likewise, as recently diagnosed by my psychiatrist that my depressive disorder is still yet to be recovered and he has reiterated to recommend the Company to allow me to stay in the current post for relieving me from stress and exempting from challenges.

I fully trust that this Company is all along a caring family to deploy an extensively reasonable accommodation to staff who are unfortunately in disadvantage. Now, I pledge to stay in my current post and be exempted from transfer of work on medical ground. I hope you and fellow managers would kindly consider my request for a certain period to facilitate my recovering of acute illness. Certainly, as a loyal staff, I will accept and welcome any proper arrangements instructed by the seniors which are of the highest interests to the Company and my health conditions.

I do not understand the parts highlighted in yellow. You need to rephrase them. The sentence highlighted in blue is even more confusing.