Dear all,
Could someone please comment my CV for an intership in management department of a fashion company (formatting has changed while posting). In printed version it fits accurately 1 page.

Thank you very much in advance. Any kind of comments from anybody who have someething to say about my work are welcome!

P.S. They also ask a photo apart from CV. Does someone have an idea of what kind of photo should I send (full-sized, colored, pretty-faced or very formal one). I need to send pdf-format of CV by e-mail.

Looking forward to your suggestions...

Name Surname

Personal Data

Date and place of birth 01 /01 /19XX, Country 1

Address in Country 2 XXXXX

Telephone <removed by mod>

E-mail Email Removed" mce_href="mailto:Email Removed">Email Removed

Skills and Attributes
· Creative, innovative, flexible

· Determined, optimistic, intelligent

· Exceptional analytical skills
· Natural leadership abilities

· Strong team player

· Energetic self-starter

Education

Sept 2005 to present

B University, degree in business administration, third year.

Average grade: 29.2 / 30.

Projects accomplished with maximum grade: Key success factors of Fashion Sector Company, Brand Identity in Fashion Sector.

Sept 2000 – Jul 2005

City State University, Institute of Management and Economics, major – International Economics, graduation with honors.

Term papers: Inflation and Unemployment, Analysis of Company’s Economical Activity, Transnational Banks, Banking Service Marketing.

Sept 1995 – Jul 2000

Lyceum of Business-Information Technologies. Graduation with honors.

Work Experience

Jun 2006 – Aug 2006

Event Manager, Assistant Director, Auto center X. A full-time position for the largest center Ford in the region. Responsibilities and achievements:

· Organized an opening event on a city scale

· Developed and handled database of VIP potential clients

· Managed customer service by means of various communication tools

Feb 2005 to Sept 2005

Finance Department Manager, Y Ltd. A full-time position for the production company. Responsibilities and achievements:

· Developed business-plan for the Brick Manufacturing Plant

· Collected and interpreted survey data on potential costumers and rivals

· Conducted negotiations with key potential customers

Aug 2004 – Nov 2004

Securities Department Manager, N Bank JSC. A part-time position for the local banking institution. Responsibilities and achievements:

· Monitored daily equity market situation

· Arranged deals on stocks and bonds trading

· Issued and discounted bills of exchange

May 2003 – Nov 2003

Retail Customers Department Manager, M-bank JSC. A part-time position for a large national banking institution. Responsibilities and achievements:

· Accomplished money transfers and opened deposits

· Issued and handled plastic credit cards

· Conducted consulting services

Languages

  • Native Russian
  • Proficient English
  • Pre-advanced Italian
  • Passive German

Computer Skills

  • Fluent in all Windows and MS-Office versions, Internet applications, ECDL

Interests

  • Fashion, psychology, communication, cultures, information technology
  • Participating and organizing social activities and events, traveling, yoga
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Hi,

There's something odd about the way you have formatted your post. Please try to post it again, so that I can read it more easily.

Thanks, Clive
Dear Clive,

I have already posted it using my old account of Siberian_Girl (http://www.EnglishForward.com/English/CvForInternship/dxmkr/Post.htm ). So I'd be very grateful if you could look at it and comment. Thanks a lot,

Best Regards,

SGirl

P.S. I have made the status of this wrong post as Resolved, but I don't know how to delete it...
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Hi,

I toook a quick look at your other post, but the actual text is in an attached file. I find it a lot easier to work with text that is right in the post, because an attached file is harder to edit directly.

I see you already have received some comments there. If you want more, at least from me, perhaps you could just paste your text directly into the Forum. Emotion: smile

Best wishes, Clive
Dear Clive,

For sure I'd like to receive more comments, and also from you as the forum Guru. But the problem is the format of my CV: it is a table. So when I copy and paste it into the post I receive the result you see above. If you do not mind, I will send you via e-mail the Word-version of the CV to reveiw it. I'd be very grateful for any comments you could make...

Kindest regards,

SGirl
Hi again,

I'm happy to have a look at your CV if you wish.Emotion: smile However, I prefer to do it in the open forum rather than privately. That way, others can learn, too.

It's best if you do a little cutting and pasting to put it here, if you are able to take the time.

Best wishes again, Clive
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Dear Clive,
I finally managed to copy the CV without table borders. Formatting is different, but the text is the same.

Hope you would have some free minutes to give a close look at it.

Thank you,

SGirl

Personal Data

Date and place of birth 01 /01 /19XX, Country 1

Address in Country 2 xxxxxxxxxxxx

Skills and Attributes

• Creative, innovative, flexible • Natural leadership abilities

• Determined, optimistic, intelligent • Strong team player

• Exceptional analytical skills • Energetic self-starter

Education

Sept 2005 to present

B. University, degree in business administration, third year. Average grade: 29.2 / 30.

Projects accomplished with maximum grade: Key success factors of Fashion Sector Company, Brand Identity in Fashion Sector.

Sept 2000 – Jul 2005

City State University, Institute of Management and Economics, major – International Economics, graduation with honors.

Term papers: Inflation and Unemployment, Analysis of Company’s Economical Activity, Transnational Banks, Banking Service Marketing.

Sept 1995 – Jul 2000

Lyceum of Business-Information Technologies. Graduation with honors.

Work Experience

Jun 2006 – Aug 2006

Event Manager, Assistant Director, Auto center SSSSSS. A full-time position for the largest center Ford in the region. Responsibilities and achievements:

• Organized an opening event on a city scale

• Developed and handled database of VIP potential clients

• Managed customer service by means of various communication tools

Feb 2005 to Sept 2005

Finance Department Manager, FFFFFF Ltd. A full-time position for the production company. Responsibilities and achievements:

• Developed business-plan for the Brick Manufacturing Plant

• Collected and interpreted survey data on potential costumers and rivals

• Conducted negotiations with key potential customers

Aug 2004 – Nov 2004

Securities Department Manager, TTTT Bank JSC. A part-time position for the local banking institution. Responsibilities and achievements:

• Monitored daily equity market situation

• Arranged deals on stocks and bonds trading

• Issued and discounted bills of exchange

May 2003 – Nov 2003

Retail Customers Department Manager, GGGG-bank JSC. A part-time position for a large national banking institution. Responsibilities and achievements:

• Accomplished money transfers and opened deposits

• Issued and handled plastic credit cards

• Conducted consulting services

Languages

• Native *ian

• Proficient English

• Pre-advanced Italian

• Passive German

Computer Skills

• Fluent in all Windows and MS-Office versions, Internet applications, ECDL

Interests

• Fashion, psychology, communication, cultures, information technology

• Participating and organizing social activities and events, traveling, yoga
Hi again,

I've made quite a few suggestions. These are based on how one would write this in Canada. Here, we would call it a resume rather than a CV.

Best wishes, Clive




Resume for Name Surname
Personal Data

Date and place of birth 01 /01 /***, Country 1

In Canada, we would not include birth-date or country of birth, because they are seen as irrelevant. In fact, it's illegal for an employer to say "I won't give you the job because you are too old, or because you are (eg) Irish." I don't know what is customary in the country you are applying to.

Address in Country 2 ***

Telephone +11 111 1111111

E-mail [email protected]

In Canada, we begin with a brief section that tells the reader what exactly you want.

Objective

A position as an intern in the Fashion Design department, where I can obtain practical experience to supplement my academic knowledge.

Skills and Attributes

These are OK and important, although pretty standard. They are what are termed 'soft skills'. Do you have any 'hard' skills, ie practical skills, that you can also include?

• Creative, innovative, flexible • Natural leadership abilities

• Determined, optimistic, intelligent • Strong team player

• Exceptional analytical skills • Energetic self-starter



Education Put Education section after Work section.

Degree in business administration, B. University Sept 2005 to present

Currently in third year. Average grade: 29.2 / 30.

Projects completed include: Key success factors of Fashion Sector Company, Brand Identity in Fashion Sector.

Sept 2000 – Jul 2005 As above, put 'name of qualification, name of institution, dates on far right

City State University, Institute of Management and Economics, major – International Economics, graduation with honors.

Term papers: Inflation and Unemployment, Analysis of Company’s Economic Activity, Transnational Banks, Banking Service Marketing.

Sept 1995 – Jul 2000

Lyceum of Business-Information Technologies. Graduation with honors. Same comment as above



Employment Experience For each job, put dates on far left, and indent all the rest

Jun 2006 – Aug 2006 Event Manager, Assistant Director, Auto center SSSSSS.

A full-time position for the largest center Ford in the region.

• Organized an opening event on a city scale

• Developed and analysed/maintained ??? database of VIP potential clients

• Managed customer service and communications

2005 Don't include months for these earlier positions. The month is not important.

Finance Department Manager, FFFFFF Ltd.

• Developed business plan for the Brick Manufacturing Plant

• Collected and interpreted survey data on potential customers and rivals

• Conducted negotiations with key potential customers

Aug 2004 – Nov 2004

Securities Department Manager, TTTT Bank JSC. (Part-time) I don't really think you need to say 'full-time for the above positions. It would probably be assumed)

• Monitored daily equity market situation

• Arranged deals on stocks and bonds trading

• Issued and discounted bills of exchange

May 2003 – Nov 2003

Retail Customers Department Manager, GGGG-bank JSC. A part-time position for a large national banking institution. Responsibilities and achievements:

• Accomplished money transfers and opened deposits

• Issued and handled credit cards

• Conducted consulting services



Languages Do you think these languages will be useful in the job? If not, omit this section. Good English will just be assumed.

Computer Skills Just add to your Skills section

• Excellent knowledge of Windows and MS-Office versions, Internet applications, ECDL



Interests Only include this section if you think these things wil be useful in the job

• Fashion, psychology, communication, cultures, information technology

• Participating and organizing social activities and events, traveling, yoga
... Great! Thaks a lot, Clive.

I haven't even dreamt of such a deep analysis of my CV for my first English intenship. It will for sure help me in applying for the future permanent job.

Thank you very much!

Kindest regards,

Asya
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