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Hello, can someone check out my essay, and give me some suggetions? I will appreciate your kindness.

Should school child be limited on the hours of watching TV program and movie?

Given the choice between agreeing or disagreeing the statement that parent should prevent their children from spending too much time watching TV programs or movies. Some people assume that watching TV can broaden children’s horizons. However, spending lots of time watching TV could make a negative impact on the children addicting to the television programs. There are three reasons as stated below.

First of all, spending too much time watching TV or movies can distract the children’s attention on their learning. Besides, they don't have enough time doing their homework or reviewing the textbook, so they would delay their sleeping time in order to finish their homework in time. Moreover, they wouldn’t concentrate on the lectures in the school, so they cannot perform well on the test. The severest impact on the children is losing their interest to discover the new things out of the TV programs or movies.

What’s more, taking long time to watch TV programs would harm the children’s heath. Not only it can easily cause the children myopia, but also restrain them from doing exercise. They would be a “couch potato” if they keep watching TV or movies. According to the research from Science American, television produce amount of radiation that could have negative effects on the development of optic nerve. Therefore, parents should let their children not watch TV or movie for a long time.

Most important, if child take much time to watch them, it would estrange their family and friends. In other words, they just receive a lot of information from watching TV, but they don’t have the ability to give it out. As a result, they would lose their creativity or thinking ability. Moreover, they can’t even communicate well with the people around them.

To sum up, I completely agree that child should be restricted from watching TV or movies for a long time for several reasons, among them distracting their learning, damage their body, and alienating from others.
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Hi,

What's your viewpoint in this essay, I'm confused by your topic sentence.

Given the choice between agreeing and disagreeing the statement that parents should prevent their children from spending too much time watching TV programs or movies. Some people assume that watching TV can broaden children’s horizons. However, spending lots of time watching TV could make a negative impact on the children addicting to the television programs. There are three reasons as stated below.<- If the essay is to prove something, then you should simply hint at the reasons for your argument, like with the sentence highlighted in blue.

It appears in your conclusion that you do try to restate your reason, which isn't clear in the topic sentence.

That's all I have time for, I'm glad if I helped.
Hi, is the sentence weird?

parents should prevent their children from spending too much time watching TV programs or movies.
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I'm guessing that is your arguement, so you want to clearly state it in a single sentence.