Topic: Because of the negative effects on health of an inactive lifestyle, all university students and school children should be forced to do sports activities at least 3 times per week. Do you agree or disagree?

These days, living without doing lots of activities has dangerous effects on people, especially their health. Some people think that the best way to avoid this problem is school should force students to do sports or do various exercises at least 3 times in a week; in my opinion, I totally agree with them.

Not having a dynamic lifestyle make teenagers have obesity. With the advancement of technology and not be under control by parents, children around the world can easily to play video games for a long time or glued on computer screens all day which make them put on weight. For example, a recent study from BBC News said that a child who only 4 years old can influence using his family smart television to watch his favorite cartoon videos without help from adults. This will lead to the fact that any younger generation, from infants to teenagers, could gain weight if they do not have regular exercises. Besides, school regulations should force students to participate in variety of sports such as swimming, running or baseball or create more sporty exercises during school time.

Furthermore, children doing less sporty activities can suffer isolation and seriously have autism. Nowadays, there is a major number of young adults prefer making friends online instead of going out to have face-to-face meetings, a journalist in CNN news analyzed. This makes children have a lack of interaction between people with others and sometimes makes them feel alone or even face with dangerous autism. Due to that impact, students should join sport clubs or projects, which have been taken up by people who have the same interest such as playing football or climbing, to communicate with pioneers or make new relationships.

However, many parents argue that doing exercises or participating in a sport is unnecessary because their children should spend more time on their studying than waste time on playing any sporty activities. Personally, I think that it is a worse awareness as it leads to a slow and inactive generations.

Indeed, I strongly agree with the regulation to have more activities in sport more than three times per week in both university students and school children because it would help youngster avoid the negative impacts on mental health problems such as lack of interactions, autism and even obesity.

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These days, Living without doing lots of physical activities has dangerous effects on our people, especially their health. Some people think that the best way to avoid this problem is for schools to should force students to do sports or do various exercises at least three 3 times in a week; in my opinion, and I totally agree with them.

Not having an active a dynamic lifestyle make (wrong form) teenagers obese. have obesity. With the advancement of technology (That does not make sense. Technology has advanced since the stone age. Technology applies to rocket ships, robots and carbon dioxide scrubbers. ) and not be (wrong form) under control by parents, children around the world can easily to play (wrong form) video games for a long time or glued (wrong word - this is very casual, almost slang.) on computer screens all day which make (wrong form) them put on weight. For example, a recent study from BBC News said that a child who only (ungrammatical ) four 4 years old can influence using his family smart television (wrong expression) to watch his favorite cartoon videos without help from adults. This will lead to the fact that any younger generation, from infants to teenagers, could gain weight if they do not have regular exercise. exercises. (wrong form) Besides, school regulations should force students to participate in a variety of sports such as swimming, running or baseball or create more sporty exercises during school time.

Furthermore, children doing less sporty activities can suffer isolation and seriously (wrong usage) have autism. (wrong word. Autism is a genetic defect. People are born with it. It is not a communicable disease or a result of diet or lifestyle. Autism comes in a spectrum of conditions, from mild to severe and debilitating. People with autism have difficulty socializing. It can be treated by therapy, but not cured.) Nowadays, there is a major number of are many young adults prefer (ungrammatical, missing subject.) making friends online instead of going out to have face-to-face meetings, a journalist in CNN news reported. analyzed. (wrong word) This makes children have a lack of interaction with between people with others and sometimes makes them feel alone or even depressed face with dangerous autism. (incorrect - and also not good English) Due to these negative consequences, that impact, students should join sport clubs or projects with other which have been taken up by people who have the same interest such as playing football or climbing, to communicate with pioneers (I do not understand this. Do you believe that people can talk to dead ancestors?) or make new relationships.

Delete the arguments that undermine your position. The essay prompt was NOT "discuss both views". It was "Do you agree or disagree?"

However, many parents argue that doing exercises or participating in a sport is unnecessary because their children should spend more time on their studying than waste time on playing any sporty activities. Personally, I think that it is a worse awareness as it leads to a slow and inactive generations.

Indeed, I strongly agree with the regulation to have students do more activities in sport more than three times per week in all education levels both university students and school children because it would help them youngster (wrong word, wrong form)avoid the negative impacts on their mental health problems such as lack of interactions, autism and even obesity.




Youngsters are children younger than teenagers (age 7-12). It is also an informal word. Generally avoid using it in essays.

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