Hi,

This is a summary of a research. Could you please include your suggestion?

Thank you so much

Keewi

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I have done research by using different kinds of research material. National youth week has its website which is really useful for my feature. It gave all background information about the National youth week. However, it did not provide enough information about the organization which first created the National youth week. Then I chose to find this from the media release of parliamentary secretary for children and youth affairs. National youth week also has a brochure that I can do research on.

My interviewee is event manager of the National youth week in Morley Galleria. His name is Mr. Graham Knapp and his work address is , Morley. The contact number is 9376 1962. The list of interview question contains six questions for the interviews. First, what are the main objectives of zone out youth centre to hold this event? Second, are the activities different from the main activities at the youth centre?(If yes, what make this event more interesting?) Third, What kind of response that you expect to get from young people? Fourth, How the slogan of National youth week represents your event? Fifth, do you have a plan for NYW next year? If no, is there any event will happen recently? Sixth, why do you choose art exhibition and music performance to be the main activities?

The audiences for this feature should be young people aged 12-25. This is because the event mainly aims at them. As this feature is written for young people, I may want to sell it for teenager magazine. The section that I like my article to be in is about interesting event.
Can anyone help me, please..Emotion: crying
I've highlighted some problem areas for you. You have a habit of putting 'the' in where it is not needed and missing it out where it is. I've also deleted your interviewees personal details as it is highly irresponsible of you to post these on a public internet forum (assuming they are indeed his real details).

I have done research by using different kinds of research material.(clumsily phrased) National youth week has its website which is really useful for my feature. It gave all background information about the National youth week. However, it did not provide enough information about the organization which first created the National youth week. Then I chose to find this from the media release of parliamentary secretary for children and youth affairs. National youth week also has a brochure that I can do research on.

My interviewee is event manager of the National youth week in Morley Galleria. His name is Mr. GKand his work address is 246 XXXX Rd., XXXX. The contact number is XXXXXXX. The list of interview question contains six questions for the interviews. First, what are the main objectives of zone out youth centre to hold this event? Second, are the activities different from the main activities at the youth centre?(If yes, what make this event more interesting?) Third, What kind of response that you expect to get from young people? Fourth, How the slogan of National youth week represents your event? Fifth, do you have a plan for NYW next year? If no, is there any event will happen recently? Sixth, why do you choose art exhibition and music performance to be the main activities?

The audiences for this feature should be young people aged 12-25. This is because the event mainly aims at them. As this feature is written for young people, I may want to sell it for teenager magazine. The section that I like my article to be in is about interesting event.
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Thank you so much.

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