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Hi all,

I'm a translator for mobile applications such as those of iPhone and have a paragraph that I'd like to add on my business website, will you please make sure if it is making sense.

"A research says, 2.3 million iPhone are sold as of March 2009 in Japan and the market share has grown nearly 350 per cent during the year. As expected, though the exact sales numbers are not available, iPhone 4G released on June 24, 2010 keep capturing its new users."

Thanks in advance,
M
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"Research shows 2.3 million iPhones have been sold in Japan as of March 2009 and its market share has grown nearly 350 percent during the year. As expected, though exact sales numbers are not available, the iPhone 4G, which was released on June 24th, 2010, is still capturing its new users' attention."
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Thank you very much! Articles and plurals are my weak points, I always can't be sure.

Thanks again for your help.
M