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Everyone has a dream. Weather they be to become a scientist and discover new and amazing things, or become a star basketball player and be the highest paid player in the league, people dream about their future. I have dreams for the future just like everyone else. Dreams of the good life with lots of money . And I will do my best to achieve them. But in the same tome , choosing a career is not an essay decision. There are many different types of jobs: adventurous and unusual jobs, and traditional jobs .

Traditional jobs are a kind of jobs which has a stable routine such as working in a company , cashier or secretary . Here are why I believe that a traditional job is bad for the individual. First : the hierarchy. No one wants to be controlled by a boss . Who really likes being told what to do? .It is a reason to not have a traditional job .Second: the lack of control. Every one wants to control his own work all by himself . We need the freedom to work when we want not when others want . Third: the stress . Working for someone else means that you are looking for someone to impress. Fourth: the lack of motivation. When you are working for others you’re trying to avoid not to be blamed for something bad by doing just enough work.

On the contrary of the traditional, there are the untraditional and adventurous jobs. A non traditional occupation is defined as any occupation in which individuals comprise less then 25% of the workforce . That means you are mostly the one who controls your own work. When you’re working for yourself or in a non-traditional role, you’re not looking for someone to impress. Instead , you can take the risk to do any thing to advance yourself or that you think is good for work with no fair of being blamed .In such jobs ,you can be yourself and work for yourself because you only have a certain amount of time, and you certainly do not want to spend that time doing someone else's work.

In brief, I prefer the exciting and unusual adventurous jobs than the traditional jobs.
Everyone has a dream. Weather they be to become a scientist and discover new and amazing things, or become a star basketball player and be the highest paid player in the league, people dream about their future. I have dreams for the future just like everyone else. Dreams of the good life with lots of money . And I will do my best to achieve them. But in the same tome I don't know this word , choosing a career is not an essay decision. There are many different types of jobs: adventurous ,unusual and traditional jobs .

Traditional jobs are a kind of jobs which has a stable routine such as working in a company , cashier or secretary . Here are why I believe it would be better if you paraphrased this sentence that a traditional job is bad for the individual. First, the hierarchy. No one wants to be controlled by a boss . Who really likes being told what to do? .It is a reason to not have a traditional job .Second, the lack of control. Every one wants to control his own work all by himself . We need the freedom to work when we want not when others want . Third, the stress . Working for someone else means that you are looking for someone to impress. Fourth, the lack of motivation. When you are working for others you’re trying to avoid not to be blamed for something bad by doing just enough work.

On the contrary of the traditional what? add a noun here, there are the untraditional and adventurous jobs. A nontraditional occupation is defined as any occupation in which individuals comprise less then 25% of the workforce . That means you are mostly I am not sure of mostly the one who controls your own work. When you’re working for yourself or in a non-traditional role, you’re not looking for someone to impress. Instead , you can take the risk to do any thing to advance yourself or that you think is good for work with no fair of being blamed .In such jobs ,you can be yourself and work for yourself because you only have a certain amount of time, and you certainly do not want to spend that time doing someone else's work.

In brief, I prefer the exciting and unusual adventurous jobs than the traditional jobs.

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