You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic.

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


Nowadays, while the international cooperation was enlarged, rich countries support poorer countries by the way that give much money. It is undeniable that this is a good action but I believe that it is not a useful idea.

There is a fact that, money only can solve temporary problems. Poor countries can upgrade road system and public constructions, build more school for children when they received money from richer countries. The government can provide food and drug for national people. However, the money is limited while more and more problem will appear. If there are supply sources from foreign nation, they will continue to fall to the difficult situations.

On the other hand, it is necessary to give other solutions to tackle this issue. The rich countries can encourage their business broadening the commercial in poor countries. This solution will increase opportunity for people such as career, the money which they earn … Besides, they can transfer modern technology to develop the industry in poor countries. On a small scale, they can give a lot of doctor who volunteer take care of free for patient. But not at least, they should give many scholarships for students. If they register an opportunity to enlarge their knowledge, they will back their countryside and improve both economic and education system. That is the way which they need to build their country and their future. Knowledge leads innovation, innovation leads growth.

In conclusion, from the above analyses, I believe that the best way helping poor countries is not financial aid, that is the road which they can develop their country by themselves way.

Nowadays, while the international cooperation is increasing was enlarged, rich countries support poorer countries by the way that giving them much money. It is undeniable that this is a good action but I believe that it is not a useful idea.

There is a fact that, Money only can only temporarily solve temporary problems. (Temporary problems are those that last for a short time. Poverty is not a temporary problem.) Poor countries can upgrade road systems and public constructions, (missing word) build more school (wrong form) for children when they received (wrong form) money from richer countries. The government can provide food and drug (wrong form) for national (wrong word) people. However, the money is limited while more and more problem (wrong form) will appear. If there are supply (wrong form) sources from foreign nation, (wrong form) they will continue to fall (wrong word) to (missing word) the difficult situations.

On the other hand, it is necessary to give (wrong word) other solutions to tackle this issue. The rich countries can encourage their business broadening the commercial (wrong word) in poor countries. This solution will increase opportunity for people such as career, (wrong form) the money which they earn … (Do not use ellipses, "etc." or "and so on" in formal essays. ) Besides, they can transfer modern technology to develop the industry in poor countries. On a small scale, they can give a lot of doctor (wrong form) who volunteer (missing word) take care of free for patient. (wrong phrasing) But not at least, they should give many scholarships for students. If they register (wrong word) an opportunity to enlarge their knowledge, they will back their countryside (wrong word) and improve both (missing word) economic (wrong word) and education system. That is the way which they need to build their country and their future. Knowledge leads (missing word) innovation, innovation leads (missing word) growth.

In conclusion, from the above analyses, I believe that the best way helping (wrong form) poor countries is not financial aid, that is the road means by which they can develop their country by themselves way.

There is some help on this topic here:

https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2011/06/ielts-writing-task-2-helping-poor-countries-topic.html

https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2018/09/students-questions-starting-essays-with-nowadays.html

Nowadays, while the [Which international cooperation is being referred to? Is there more than one? ] international cooperation was enlarged, [Not a natural collocation: see graph below] rich countries support poorer countries by the way that give much money [by + gerund] . It is undeniable that this is a good action but I believe that it is not a useful idea. [Why not "well-intentioned" but "flawed"?]

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation&year_start=1900&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bis_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bwas_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsecure_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bbe_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bpromote_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Brequires_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhave_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Brequire_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsecuring_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsecured_VERB%3D%3Ecooperation%3B%2Cc0

There is a fact that, [Not a natural phrase: see graph below.] money only can solve temporary problems. [Or do you mean solve problems temporarily? ] Poor countries can upgrade road system and public constructions [infrastructure and buildings], build more school [School is usually countable: 'build more school' suggests that there is only one and it will be extended.] for children when they received [tense?] money from richer countries. The government can provide food and drug [food is usually uncountable, but 'drug' countable: this makes a difference.] for national people. [its citizens] However, the money is limited while [whereas] more and more problem will appear. If there are supply sources from foreign nation [singular or plural?], they will continue to fall [be applied] to the difficult [emergency?] situations.

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=There+is+a+fact+that%2C+The+fact+is+that&year_start=1900&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2CThere%20is%20a%20fact%20that%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2CThe%20fact%20is%20that%3B%2Cc0

On the other hand, [I don't see why this is on the other hand; what was the first argument?] it is necessary to give [provide/come up with] other solutions to tackle this issue. The rich countries can encourage their business broadening the commercial [Do you mean encourage more business investment? Why would businesses do that without some monetary incentive?] in poor countries. This solution will increase opportunity [singular or plural?] for people such as career [singular or plural?], the money which they earn … [Trailing dots are a device used in fiction writing only.] Besides, ['Besides' is used to foreshadow an overwhelming argument, not just an extra point.] they can transfer modern technology to develop the industry [Which industry? 'The' suggests you have a particular one in mind. ] in poor countries. On a small scale, they can give a lot of ['a lot of' is informal] doctor [singular or plural?] who volunteer take care of free [ 'volunteer' implies for free.]for patient. [They already do this: Medicins sans Frontiere: International Red Cross et al] But not at least, [The phrase is : last but not least. However I would not use it in an IELTS essay.] they should give many scholarships for students. If they register an opportunity to enlarge their knowledge, they will back [support] their countryside and improve both [missing article] economic and education system. That is the way which they need to build their country and their future. Knowledge leads innovation, innovation leads growth. [However, growth may only make the rich richer: it does not automatically address the issue of poverty.]

In conclusion, from the above analyses, ["in conclusion" implies a summary of the above analyses.] I believe that the best way [missing preposition] helping poor countries is not financial aid, [but support which allows them to pursue in their own development in their own way. ]that is the road which they can develop their country by themselves way.

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=the+best+way+to+help%2C+the+best+way+of+helping&year_start=1900&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cthe%20best%20way%20to%20help%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cthe%20best%20way%20of%20helping%3B%2Cc0

More work needed on generalizing with countable vs uncountable nouns.

My personal view:

One of the big questions about international aid and development is: huge sums of aid have been put into Africa over the last sixty years. What has been achieved? Why do they still need help, even more help than ever before? I don't pretend to know the answer. Perhaps one of the greatest achievements was setting up universal primary education in Kenya.

Another issue might be that, while ending poverty sounds laudable, the planet and environment could not support a situation where we were all rich and over-consumed.

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