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Topic: Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

It is not necessary to eat meat to get all nutrients needed for good healthy. Many people choose not to eat meat may in order to enjoy better health. Although I agree that they will eat more plant-based foods, and may be more active to have a strong heart. I do not believe that everyone should stop eating animal products.

On the one hand, many people become vegetarian food for a range of reasons. Firstly, vegetarian food has been found to reduce the risk of heart disease, obesity. Specially, vegetarian has a lower risk of many different types of cancer, compared with meat eaters. Secondly, vegetarian food tends to be lower in fat and higher of fiber than animal-based foods. Take tomato examples, it has a great source of vitamin C and vitamin K, it also has been linked to many benefit regarding cancer prevention and skin health. Finally, producing vegetarian food which we do not kill animals, and it reduces damage to the environment.

On the other hand, vegetarian foods cannot suitable people of all ages. Here is some disadvantages to take into consideration before becoming eat. People do not eat meat or fish may lack the nutrients. Including iron, calcium and protein. For instance, as young children bodies are still developing so they needs protein and vitamin to support their bodies. Secondly, if the pregnant women does not consume any animal products, she may not have enough protein. Therefore, if someone want to become vegetarian food, they have to learn skills.

In conclusion, although a vegetarian diet is beneficial in some ways. However, the benefits will not immediately follow a decision to stop eating animal products.

279 words.

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Topic: Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

It is not necessary to eat meat to get all nutrients needed for good healthy. Many people choose not to eat meat may in order to enjoy better health. Although I agree that they will should eat more plant-based foods, and may be more active to have a strong heart., I do not believe that everyone should stop eating animal products.

On the one hand, many people become vegetarian food for a range of reasons. Firstly, vegetarian food has been found to reduce the risk of heart disease, and obesity. Specifically, a vegetarian has a lower risk of many different types of cancer, compared with meat eaters. Secondly, vegetarian food tends to be lower in fat and higher of in fiber than animal-based foods. Take the tomato, for examples, it has a great source of vitamin C and vitamin K, and it also has been linked to many benefits regarding cancer prevention and skin health. Finally, in producing vegetarian food which we do not kill animals, and it reduces damage to the environment.

On the other hand, vegetarian foods cannot are not suitable for people of all ages. Here is/There are some disadvantages to take into consideration before becoming eat.? People who do not eat meat or fish may lack the nutrients. Including, such as iron, calcium and protein. For instance, as young children's bodies are still developing, so they needs they need protein and vitamin to support their bodies. Secondly, if the pregnant women does not consume any animal products, she they may not have enough protein. Therefore, if someone people want to become vegetarian food, they have to learn new skills habits.

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In conclusion, although a vegetarian diet is beneficial in some ways. However, the benefits will not immediately follow a decision to stop eating animal products.

279 words.

- although or however, but not both - check the difference. However fit best, as marked.

- hope this is somewhat helpful.

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The introduction is sixty words. Please consider an examiner's comments below on another essay for IELTS purposes.

"An IELTS essay is a very short piece of writing completed in 40 minutes with no research....

I would never advise anyone to write a 75 word introduction because it takes time away from the important parts of the essay: the body paragraphs. There is a reason why most good introductions are around half this length.

I have seen many IELTS writers produce introductions of even up to 100 words, and this almost always leads to a low score because they are not providing what the test asks for: ideas and development."

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Except the introduction is good and doesn't waste words, in my opinion.

The marking criteria for Band 7 (Task Achievement) require the essay to 'present, extend, and support main ideas', and so this is where the focus should be. There are no assessment criteria specific to the introduction, although there is a requirement to 'present a clear position throughout the response'.

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