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Task: More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars, and other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Essay:

In recent years, the number of people that want to buy clothes, cars, and other items of famous brands has increased. There are a number of reasons for this trend, which is having a significant impact on both family life and on the community as a whole.

There are two important reasons why people want to buy famous brands of items. Firstly, most of them believe that there is a connection between the brand of an item and its quality. They reason that good things will be used and recommended by people, and that resulted in good quality items of popular brands. Secondly, people are affected by fashion trends and long to be with fashionable people. For example, if a new design of trousers is trending, then wearing them will make people feel like they get on well with the others.

However, this tendency could have negative consequences in terms of both family life and society. An important concern for family life is that famous brands usually have expensive products. So, the cost of those popular clothes, cars, and other items will be a burden for families that do not have an abundance of money. Another negative factor is that this trend makes people become more material driven and people who own items of famous brands would be respected more than those who do not.

In conclusion, there are a number of reasons why famous brands of clothes, cars, and other items were bought by more and more people. As a result, there could be negative influences on individual families and society at large.

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Hi all, I posted this as anonymous by mistake. So, it's me who wrote the essay.

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In recent years, the number of people that want to buy clothes, cars, and other items of famous brands has increased. There are a number of reasons for this trend, which is having a [ 1] detrimental significant impact on both family life and on the community as a whole.

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However, this tendency could have negative consequences in terms of both family life and society. An important concern for family life is that famous brands usually have expensive products. So, Therefore, the cost of those popular clothes, cars, and other items will be a burden for families that do may not have an abundance of money. Another negative factor is that this trend makes people become more materialistic, and they may even start judging others based on the brands of items they have. driven and people who own items of famous brands would be respected more than those who do not.

In conclusion, [ 2] the main reasons people buy famous brands include perception of quality, and social prestige. However, this trend has negative consequences, especially in terms of the financial burden it entails and in that it promotes a materialistic ethos. there are a number of reasons why famous brands of clothes, cars, and other items were bought by more and more people. As a result, there could be negative influences on individual families and society at large.

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[ 1]: You need to clearly state your position in the last sentence of the introduction.

[ 2]: Do not write a generic conclusion. The conclusion is supposed to be the most specific part of the essay. All you need is a sentence or two that summarize the main points/findings from the body paragraphs.