There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher.

What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem?

It is argued that the global temperature is increasing at a rapid pace due to human beings. This is the serious issue as it will impact the whole planet adversely. Increased usage of automobiles and industrialization are the two main reasons of this problem. There are a number of possible solutions by which this can be mitigated.

Firstly, people have increased the usage of cars and motor bikes and hardly use public transport. These vehicles emit carbon in the air which reduces the oxygen. This results in the global warming that impacts the temperature of the world. Secondly, too many industries have been established which make myriad of products for human consumption. These industries use diesel in running plants and emit toxic gases in the atmosphere. Consequently, the climate of the many countries has been impacted significantly. In 2017, for instance, the average temperature of China increased by 2 degree Celsius. This is because more than 500 factories had been established and they provided cars to their most employees for personal use.

However, there are two effective solutions to the problem of global warming. One way to tackle this issue is that government-sponsored campaigns should be run which will inform people about the dangers of carbon emission so that they use public transport instead of relying on cars. A low number of cars will emit less carbon in the air and this will be positive for the global climate. Another method of dealing with this problem is people should be encouraged to plant more trees. Afforestation produces oxygen in the atmosphere that will alleviate the toxic gases. Russia, for example, planted more than 500 million trees in 2016. Since then, its temperature has not changed considerably and weather remains favorable now.

In conclusion, planting trees and informing public about the hazards of toxic gases are the effective solutions to the problem of rising global temperature. If implemented successfully, temperature would not increase rapidly.

It is argued that the average global temperature is increasing at a rapid pace due to human activities. beings. This is the serious issue as it will impact the whole planet adversely. Increased usage of automobiles and industrialization are the two main activities contributing to reasons of this problem. There are a number of possible solutions by which this can be mitigated.

Firstly, First, people have increased the usage of cars and motor bikes and hardly use public transport. These vehicles emit carbon (wrong word) in into the air which reduces the oxygen. (?? Nothing happens to the oxygen fraction, which is around 21%. The percent of carbon dioxide is very very small in comparison, 0.036%.) This results in the global warming that impacts the temperature of the world. Secondly, Second, too many industries have been established which make myriad of products for human consumption. These industries use diesel in running plants and emit toxic gases into in the atmosphere. Consequently, the climate of the many countries has been impacted significantly. In 2017, for instance, the average temperature of China (?? Do you have any evidence of this?) increased by 2 degree (wrong form) Celsius. This is because more than 500 factories had been established and they provided cars to their most employees for personal use.

However, there are two effective solutions to the problem of global warming. One way to tackle this issue is that government-sponsored campaigns should be run which will inform people about the dangers of carbon emission so that they use public transport instead of relying on cars. A low number of cars will emit less carbon (wrong word) in into the air and this will be positive for the global climate. Another method of dealing with this problem is people should be encouraged to plant more trees. Afforestation (wrong word) produces oxygen in the atmosphere that will alleviate the toxic gases. Russia, for example, planted more than 500 million trees in 2016. Since then, its temperature has not changed considerably (Global warming is not specific to any one country. The atmosphere does not obey or recognize political boundaries!) and weather remains favorable now.

In conclusion, planting trees and informing public about the hazards of toxic gases are the effective solutions to the problem of rising global temperature. If implemented successfully, temperature would not increase rapidly.

Thank you Alphe.

Please suggest the types of examples which I can use in IELTS essays. I usually use countries' name to make it specific but as you have highlighted mistakes in my both examples, I am getting confused now.

What could be the better examples in this essay?

Best regards

Students: Are you brave enough to let our tutors analyse your pronunciation?
naresh kumar 487I usually use countries' name to make it specific but as you have highlighted mistakes in my both examples,

It is OK to use countries' names if you are sure about the information.

Reference:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Climate_change_in_China

China observed a ground average temperature increase of 0.24℃/decade from 1951 to 2017, exceeding the global ground average temperature increase rate. 

But it does not say that the cause of this change was the opening of 500 factories and giving cars to all the employees. Do manufacturers in China give cars to all their workers? I find that very difficult to believe.

Thank you Alphe