Topic: In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.
Do you agree or disagree?
My essay:
It is argued that the government should rise a higher tax on junk food because of the increasing number of health risks associated with consuming this kind of food. This essay agrees that a higher tax rate should be paid by fast-food companies. Firstly by raising the tariff on junk food, the local authority can invest health care system and secondly, a higher tax rate causes junk food's price more expensive which could stop people from eating them.
The money raised from taxes could be invested by the government to improve the health care system to treat people who have health risks associated with junk food. By increasing the tax paid by the fast food company, the government can use the revenue to provide some free treatments to help people who suffer from health issues associated with junk food. For example, Canada has held some public sessions to give people advice about how to eat healthily.
Increasing the tax on junk food would raise their price and lower consumption. Most of the consumers of fast food are people who are in the lower class of society, and could not afford a pricey meal. Because of raising the tax rate on fast food, the company needs to increase the cost of fast food to make revenue, which makes their consumers stop eating junk food. For example, some local authority levy a tariff on alcohol which increasing their cost has led to lower consumer and better general public health.
In conclusion, this essay supports that the local authorities should levy a tariff on fast food because of its negative effects on public health. Moreover, the revenue that comes from junk food companies ought to be used to improve the healthcare system. In addition, those companies will increase the price of their products which will lower the number of their customers.
It is argued that the government should rise (wrong word) levy / impose / put a higher tax on junk food because of the increasing number of health risks associated with consuming this kind of food. I agree This essay agrees (The prompt is "Do YOU agree, not "does your essay agree." That does not make sense.) that a higher sales tax rate should be paid by fast-food companies. (You need to put your arguments in the body paragraphs, not in the introduction. Delete the rest of this paragraph. It is repeated in your body paragraphs. ) Firstly First, by raising the tariff on junk food, the local authority can invest in the health care system with the extra income and secondly, second, a higher tax rate causes junk food's price (wrong usage. An iPhone is expensive. Designer clothes are expensive. A Gucci bag is expensive. Prices are not "expensive." You cannot buy a price. ) to be more expensive which could stop people from eating it. them.
The money raised from these higher taxes could be used invested by the government to improve the health care system to treat people who have health issues risks associated with junk food. By increasing the tax paid by the fast food companies, (It is confusing. Are you writing about the income tax, assessed on the company's profits, or a sales tax that customer pays when they purchase the food? Your writing needs to be consistent. ) the government can use the revenue to provide some free treatments to help people who suffer from health issues associated with junk food. (This is repetitious. You need to provide a different argument point. For example, (Advice is not treatment. This is not an example of "free treatments".) Canada has held some public sessions to give people advice about how to eat healthily.
Increasing the tax on junk food would raise its their price and lower consumption. Most of the consumers of fast food are people who are in the lower income segment class of society, and could not afford a pricey meal. Because of raising the tax rate on fast food, the company needs to increase the cost of fast food to make revenue, which makes their consumers stop eating junk food. For example, some local authorities levy a tariff on alcohol which increases its their cost and has led to lower consumer (wrong word. A consumer is a person. "Lower person" is not good.) and better general public health.
In conclusion, this essay supports that (Do not use the word "essay".) the local authorities should levy a tariff on fast food because of its negative effects on public health. Moreover, the extra revenue raised that comes from junk food companies ought to be used to improve the healthcare system. In addition, those companies will increase the price of their products which will lower the number of their customers.
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Topic: In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.
Do you agree or disagree?
My essay:
It is argued that the government should levy a higher tax on junk food because of the increasing number of health risks associated with consuming this kind of food. I agree that a higher sales tax should be paid by fast-food companies to lower the consumption of this unhealthy food.
The money raised from these higher taxes could be invested by the government to improve the health care system to give better treatments to patients. Particularly, as having more revenue coming from sales tax of fast food, the local authorities will have a bigger budget to provide more advanced equipment to local hospitals and expand current facilities of healthcare centers. For example, this has been done previously in different areas like transportation, the governments have imposed a higher tax on personal automobiles which results in more funds for improving public transportations for people.
Increasing the tax on junk food would raise its price and lower consumption. Most of the consumers of fast food are people who are in the lower income segment of society, and could not afford a pricey meal. Because of raising the tax rate on fast food, the company needs to increase the cost of fast food to make revenue, which makes their consumers stop eating junk food. For example, some local authorities levy a tariff on alcohol which increases its cost and has led to lower consumption and better general public health.
In conclusion, the local authorities should levy a tariff on fast food because of its negative effects on public health. Moreover, the extra revenue raised ought to be used to develop better healthcare facilities for people. In addition, those companies will increase the price of their products which will lower the number of customers.
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It is argued that the government should levy a higher tax on junk food because of the increasing number of health risks associated with consuming this kind of food. I agree that a higher sales tax should be assessed paid by fast-food companies to lower the consumption of this unhealthy food.
A sales tax is added to the bill that the customer pays. The company that manufactures, sells or produces the item does not pay this kind of tax.
In this example, there is an 8 3/8% tax rate on fast food. That money goes to the authorities. This restaurant also imposes a service charge. That money goes to the restaurant. If the sales tax were increased to 10%, then the sales tax would be $3.45 instead of $2.89, and the total bill would come to $39.31.
The money raised from these higher taxes could be invested by the government to improve the health care system to give better treatments to those suffering from diabetes, heart conditions or high blood pressure. patients. Particularly, as having more revenue coming from sales tax of fast food, the local authorities will have a higher income which they can budget for bigger budget to provide (A budget is not money.) more advanced equipment for to local hospitals and expand current facilities of healthcare centers. For example, (Wrong usage. This is not an example of more advanced equipment for hospitals.) this has been done previously in different areas like transportation, (comma splice error. Read about this mistake here: https://chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm) the governments have imposed a higher tax on personal automobiles which results in more funds for improving public transportations (Transportation is non-count) for people.
Increasing the tax on junk food would raise its price and lower consumption. Most of the consumers of fast food are people who are in the lower income segment of society, and could not afford a pricey meal. Because of raising the tax rate on fast food, the company needs to increase the cost of fast food to make revenue, which makes their consumers stop eating junk food. I (That makes no sense. Increasing the sales tax has no financial impact on the restaurant or the company that supplies the food to the restaurant. The tax is simply added to the amount that the customer pays. ) For example, (Wrong usage. You need to give an example of the idea you just presented - in this case a company that increased their prices so much that all their customers went away, and the company went bankrupt.) some local authorities levy a tariff on alcohol which increases its cost and has led to lower consumption and better general public health.
In conclusion, the local authorities should levy a tax tariff (wrong word. a tariff is a government tax on imports or exports) on fast food because of its negative effects on public health. Moreover, the extra revenue raised ought to be used to develop better healthcare facilities for people. In addition, those companies will increase the price of their products which will lower the number of customers.