SUBJECT:-

Some people believe that young people know about international pop and movies stars but know very less about famous people from the History in their own country. Why is this? How can more interest be created in young people to gain more knowledge about their own famous people from History.


Since the development of the entertain industry has improved, the number of fan follower of artists have increased. many of them believe that people are more inclined to international music and movie. Though, it has created the popularity gap between the international artist and the artist of home country. This essay looks the reasons and suggests the solution to make our young generation aware about the past Icons Ideals and the great perfectionist of history.

Being unaware about the perfectionist of music and movie of own country and became fan follower of the artists of country who resides far. There are some reasons which could be easily understood. First of all, the customary tradition are not valued by our people; reason being , migration takes place . For example, Globalization allows many people to earn more money and make their life more standard. This makes migrated person far from the customs it follows and accepts the culture they live in.

In addition to , the another reason is advertising of the music, the young generation find only to listen and they start follow it. Thus, the artist who lives far from us live in the young people' s heart.


Looking upon the issue, anyone can be disheartened therefore, its is necessary to resolve the concern by changing the method of practicing entertainment. Firstly, we should raise the features of our past Idols, Icons celebrities so that young people may also know. Secondly, we must advertise those as business ambassador and promote them in stories of our children for example an animated story, the king shivaji who ruled and fought against the cruels. This how we can our child inspired to follow them and the same in music and movies also.

In conclusion, the concern of forgetting the own artists and following the the artists of dreamland was the problem of keeping our self from the reality of the country you live. Therefore, Advertising is the better solution to make our young children aware.



Your writing has a lot of mistakes. You need to study vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, much of your essay was not answering the topic question. The topic was this: Young people idolize international movie stars and pop music. They do not honor the heroes of their own country's history such as military leaders, famous sportsmen, scientists or political leaders.



Since the development of the entertain (wrong word) industry has improved, (What do you mean by "the development has improved? Was there a problem with it? This is off-topic.) the number of fan follower (wrong words) of artists have increased. many of them believe that people are more inclined to international music and movie. (wrong expression) Though, (wrong punctuation) it has created the popularity gap (??) between the international artist and the artist of home country. (Off topic. ) This essay looks the reasons and suggests the solution to make our young generation aware about the past Icons Ideals and the great perfectionist of history.

Never mention your essay, your writing or what you are going to tell the reader. Write a proper thesis statement. THat is the main point of your essay that you will argue in the body paragraphs.


Being unaware about the perfectionist of music (wrong expression) and movie of own country and became fan follower of the artists of country who resides far. (wrong expression) This is not a sentence. It is a fragment.) There are some reasons which could be easily understood. First of all, the customary tradition (wrong form) are not valued by our people; the reason being , that migration takes place . (This is off-topic. Migration and globalization are not related to the topic you have been asked to write about) For example, Globalization (wrong punctuation) allows many people to earn more money and make their life more standard. This makes migrated person far from the customs it follows and accepts the culture they live in. off-topic)

In addition to (missing word - to what?), the another reason is advertising of the music, (wrong punctuation. Comma splice error, ungrammatical sentence) the young generation find only to listen and they start follow it. Thus, the artist who lives far from us live (wrong form) in the young people' s heart. (wrong form)


Looking upon the issue, anyone can be disheartened (wrong punctuation - run-on sentence) therefore, its (wrong form) is necessary to resolve the concern by changing the method of practicing entertainment. Firstly, First, we should raise the features (wrong word) of our past Idols, Icons celebrities so that young people may also know. Secondly, Second, we must advertise those as business ambassador and promote them in stories of our children for example an animated story, the king shivaji (wrong punctuation) who ruled and fought against the cruels.(wrong word ) This how we can our child inspired (ungrammatical) to follow them and the same in music and movies also.

In conclusion, the concern of forgetting the own artists (off-topic) and following the the artists of dreamland (wrong word) was the problem of keeping our self from the reality of the country you live. Therefore, Advertising (wrong punctuation) is the better solution to make our young children aware.

could you help me to tell where i can learn those things. I don t have personal teacher in my area. so i completely depend on internet for learning . Please tell how can I?

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vishal anand 4377Could you help me and to tell me where I can learn those things. I don't have a personal teacher in my area, so I am completely dependent on the internet for learning . Please tell how can I do this?

Your question is very vague and open-ended. You should make some specific targets for yourself. A SMART target is Specific, Measurable (there has to be a way to measure your progress), Achievable, Realistic and Timely (set a time for completion.) WIthout a goal or target, you will get discouraged. Categorize your goals:

1. Targets on learning English grammar

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3. Targets on IELTS writing task 1.

etc.

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