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The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990.


The line gragh illustrate the fast food consumption in the UK every week between 1970 and 1990.


Overall, it is clear that the consumption of fish & chips is the most significant change. While pizza and fish & chips consumption shown a increase trend, hamburger consumption decreased slightly at the same period.


In 1970, the qualities of pizza consumption is the highest with 300 grams while the consumption of fish & chips and hamburger reached nearly 100 and about 30 grams respectively. After the consumption of pizza fell to 200 grams in 1985, this figure increased slightly in 1990.


Unlike pizza consumption, fish & chips and hamburger consumption is saw a sharp increase. The consumption of fish & chips and hamburger came to 150 and 90 grams respectively in 1980. After 5 years, fish & chips consumption had a dramatically rise to 300 grams followed by hamburger consumption growth moderately to about 120 grams. In 1990, the consumption of fish & chips rose significant to 500 grams and became the highest consumption at this time. Similiar, hamburger consumption had an increase and reached nearly 300 grams in 1990.

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The line gragh illustrate (wrong verb form, also not a good verb for this task. Read my advice.) the fast food consumption in the UK every week between 1970 and 1990. (You missed some important aspects of this graph. There are three curves, not one - "fast food" as you have said. Your sentence is misleading. Also, you did not mention the units on the graph.)

Overall, it is clear that (Read my advice) the consumption of fish & chips (You did not tell the examiner that this is on the graph.) is (The data is from the past, so past tense is the better choice.) the most significant change. While pizza and fish & chips consumption shown (wrong verb form,) a increase (wrong verb form) trend, hamburger consumption decreased slightly at (wrong word) the same period.


In 1970, the qualities (wrong word) of pizza consumption is the highest with 300 grams while the consumption of fish & chips and hamburger reached nearly 100 and about 30 grams respectively. After the consumption of pizza fell (You mix up present and past tense. Choose one and be consistent throughout the essay.) to 200 grams in 1985, this figure (wrong word) it increased slightly in 1990.


Unlike pizza consumption, fish & chips and hamburger consumption is saw (ungrammatical) a sharp increase. The consumption of fish & chips and hamburger came to 150 and 90 grams respectively in 1980. After 5 years, Five years later fish & chips consumption had a dramatically (wrong form) rise to 300 grams followed by hamburger consumption growth (unnatural - poor English) moderately to about 120 grams. In 1990, the consumption of fish & chips rose significant (wrong word) to 500 grams and became the highest consumption at this time. Similiar, (wrong form) hamburger consumption had an increase and reached nearly 300 grams in 1990.


You need to focus on adverbs and verb forms.

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