My essay:

The bar chart illustrates the frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA in 2003, 2006, and 2013.

Overall, the most significant proportion of people eating in fast food restaurants were those going once a week and once or twice a month. Those eating daily and those never eating in comparison were the least.

People eating in fast food diners once a week contributed to be the highest in both the years 2003 and 2006, at 31% and 33% respectively. However, the percentage dropped to 27 in 2013. The people eating in fast food places once or twice a month accounted for 30% in 2003, experiencing a drop of 5% in 2006. It increased to 33% in 2013, making this category the largest that year.

The proportion that ate in fast food place several times a week varied between 15% and 20% during the period, while the ratio that ate there a few times a year showed an increase from 13% to 15% over the period. Meanwhile, the proportion of those eating at fast food restaurants every day and never was less than 5% in all three years.

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