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Topic: The diagram below shows the development of a particular area between 1965 and the present day.

The picture illustrates a residential area before and after some developments from 1965 to now.

Overall, the area has been renovated with the adding of new structures, and the most notable change taking place in the area is the construction of a road bridge, which replaces the ferry.

As can be seen from the map, on the northern side of the area, the forests on the left riverside have been removed to make way for adding a carpark next to the bank of the river. There is also a small car park which was built on the side from the river and this car park is linked to the main road.

In the southern part of the area, more accommodation has been constructed on the other side of the river, which is located to the east of the map, which includes apartments and housing. Apart from these structures, it is planned to build a foot bridge next to the road bridge which can go direct to the city.


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The picture ("Picture" is ok, but very imprecise. It is not ideal. Use the most specific word for the infographic. Also, there are TWO of them. One is "before" and the other is "after". ) two maps illustrate a residential area before and after some developments from 1965 to now.

Overall, the area has been built up renovated (wrong word. A kitchen can be renovated with new appliances and fixtures. A hotel can be renovated with updated guest bedrooms. Renovate is NOT used for infrastructure and housing developments. Renovate comes from the roots "re-" (again) and "nov" (new). "Built up" means that the area does not have much empty land left for more construction. ) adding with single-family houses as well as apartment buildings. But of new structures, and the most notable change taking place in the area (Taking place means present time. It is not appropriate. ) is the construction of a road bridge, which replaced the ferry.

As can be seen from the map, (Delete. These words have no content.) on the northwest corner of the map side of the area, the forests just west of the river on the left riverside (Do not use left-right on a map. Use east-west) have been cut down removed to make way for adding a carpark. next to the bank of the river. There is also a small car park which was built on the other side from of the river and this car park is linked to along the main road.

In the southern part of the area, more accommodation housing has been constructed on the other side of the river, which is located to the east of the map, (East of the map means that it does not appear on the map. It is off the map on the east side. You need to write much clearer sentences.) which includes apartments and housing. Apart from these structures, it is planned (The footbridge was built in 2010. This year is not 2005 is it? You have a very outdated source for your Task 1 practice essays. I advise not using sites that have samples that are a decade old!) ) to build a foot bridge next to the road bridge which can go direct (There is no city on the map.) to the city.

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Sample essay: ~180 words

Paragraph 1: Describe the maps.

Paragraph 2: Overview - write about the main features.

Paragraph 3: Details (For before-after maps I write one paragraph for "before" and another with the changes.)


The two maps show the area in the vicinity of a community called Assford as it was in 1965 and as it is in the present day.

The community of Assford has expanded significantly since 1965. In particular, there is a new highway and bridge for vehicles instead of a ferry crossing.

In 1965, Assford was a small cluster of cottages located along the east bank of a river. The river is the main feature on the map, and it runs in a north-south direction. The area was otherwise undeveloped.

Now Assford is much larger with high-rise apartments and subdivisions of single-family homes. It is still located entirely on the east side of the river. The only new construction across the river is a large car park on the river bank, just north of City Road, the new highway, which now crosses the river south of Assford. Two smaller car parks are also seen near the center of Assford and south of the highway. A pedestrian bridge was planned for 2010.