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The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.


my answer:

The diagram illustrates the reproduction of honey bees in one cycle. Overall, the entire life cycle of a honey bee takes from 34 to 36 days to complete. The process consists of six stages, beginning with laying eggs and ending up with mature adult honey bees.

The life cycle begins with laying eggs, a mature female honey bee lays one or two eggs every three days, which hatch after 9 to 10 days. It takes five days to completely hatch out of the egg.

The nymph of the honey bee will moulting three times during the period of its growth. On the seventh day, the honey bees moulted for the first time after hatching, again on the ninth day and again before to be a young adult. The young adult honey bee emerges after 30 to 31 days from the beginning of the cycle, and take 4 days to reach maturity.

You barely wrote the minimum number of words. With the repetition, you may lose points for inadequate length. The coherence and cohesion needs improvement.


The diagram illustrates the reproduction lifecycle of honey bees, from egg to mature adult. in one cycle. (end of paragraph #1. You are starting a new topic.)

Overall, the entire life cycle of a honey bee takes from 34 to 36 days to complete. The process consists of six stages, (You did not mention these stages in the detail paragraph, so the reader is confused.) beginning with laying eggs laid by a mature female bee and ending up with mature adult honey bees.

The life cycle begins with laying eggs, (You already said this. Do not repeat the same information.) A mature female honey bee lays one or two eggs every three days, which hatch after 9 to 10 days. It takes five days to completely hatch out of the egg, at which time it is called a nymph, or immature bee. (Your train of thought continues. Do not start a new paragraph.) The nymph of the honey bee will moulting (Wrong verb form) three times during the period of its growth. On the seventh day, (seven days after what? ) the honey bees moulted (Wrong verb form) for the first time after hatching, again on the ninth day and again before to be (Wrong verb form) a young adult. The young adult honey bee emerges after 30 to 31 days from the beginning of the cycle, and take (Wrong verb form) 4 days to reach maturity.


Sample essay:

The diagram depicts the lifecycle of a honeybee, beginning with an egg, and ending as an adult capable of reproducing.

Overall, the cycle is complete in just over a month, between 34 and 36 days. There are four stages: the egg, the hatching, the nymph, and the immature adult. About equal amounts of time are divided between the first two stages together (egg and its hatching) and the nymph stage.

Mature female honeybees are capable of laying one or two eggs every three days. Eggs are incubated and develop for nine to ten days when the hatching process begins. It takes another five days for the bee to fully free itself from its egg. At that point, it is called a nymph. Nymphs have a rapid period of growth, during which they must moult, or shed their exoskeleton, three times. This phase requires about sixteen days, and is complete around day 31 of the entire cycle. The end of the nymph phase marks the start of the young adult stage, which has the shortest span of the four, only four days.